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Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

Modern advancements have altered the way we communicate with one another. This essay will discuss how we can now form bonds with people all over the world, and then state that on the whole, this is a very welcome development. For the first time in human history, people can communicate with someone they have never met before, in a country they have never been to, through the internet. These may not be the same kind of friendships we traditionally form face-to-face, but it is hard to dispute that they are not ‘relationships’. Social media, such as Facebook and Instagram, provide a platform that allows us to chat and comment on someone else’s life instantaneously. For example, there are now IELTS groups on Facebook where students can help and support each other by providing helpful resources and feedback on essays. Overall, this new phenomenon has great benefits, principally encouraging tolerance of other cultures. Before computers we hardly ever came across someone from another culture, let alone people from a myriad of different places in one Facebook group. This has led to people understanding that we are all mostly the same and you should not judge someone because they were born in a different place. For example, thousands of Palestinians and Israelis have joined the same online groups that show support for peace and solidarity, something that would not have been possible 25 years ago. In conclusion, the web has changed our interactions forever, making the world a global village where people can freely chat and form lasting connections and this essay only sees this as a good thing that will continue to bring citizens of the world together.
Modern advancements have altered the way we communicate with one another. This essay will discuss how we can
now
form bonds with
people
all over the world, and then state that
on the whole
, this is a
very
welcome development.

For the
first
time in human history,
people
can communicate with
someone
they have never met
before
, in a country they have never been to, through the internet. These may not be the same kind of friendships we
traditionally
form face-to-face,
but
it is
hard
to dispute that they are not ‘relationships’. Social media, such as Facebook and Instagram, provide a platform that
allows
us to chat and comment on
someone
else’s life
instantaneously
.
For example
, there are
now
IELTS groups on Facebook where students can
help
and support each other by providing helpful resources and feedback on essays.

Overall
, this new phenomenon has great benefits,
principally
encouraging tolerance of other cultures.
Before
computers we
hardly ever came across
someone
from another culture,
let
alone
people
from a myriad of
different
places in one Facebook group. This has led to
people
understanding that we are all
mostly
the
same and
you should not judge
someone
because
they
were born
in a
different
place.
For example
, thousands of Palestinians and Israelis have
joined
the same online groups that
show
support for peace and solidarity, something that would not have been possible 25 years ago.

In conclusion
, the web has
changed
our interactions forever, making the world a global village where
people
can
freely
chat and form lasting connections and this essay
only
sees
this as a
good
thing that will continue to bring citizens of the world together.
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IELTS essay Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
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