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Nowadays, the consumption of fast food is becoming increasingly popular, even though it has many side effects.

Nowadays, the consumption of fast food is becoming increasingly popular, even though it has many side effects. lRW8J
Nowadays, the consumption of fast food is becoming increasingly popular, even though it has many side effects. People are so addicted to eat junk food that raising tax on them would not bring any change in the habits. As well as it could further bring financial problems to that individual. This essay will discuss why imposing higher tax is not beneficial to the society. Firstly, if once human being got habituated to eat fast food, it is totally uncontrollable to stop that person from eating it. On biological perspective, eating junk food releases oxytocin also called as a happy hormone which is what keeps us from eating sugary dishes again and again. For example, Andhra Pradesh stands first in diabetic related issues, although knowing this fact people in this region has high sugary diet. According to a research on diabetic patients it clear that, even after knowing the fact that they have type 2 diabetics, there cravings to consume sweet dishes did not stop. Secondly, raising taxes on junk food could lead to financial trouble in the long term owing to the fact that junk food has become part of everyone's life in this modern era. For instance, a person who love sweets, would obviously buy them even though there is a raise in the price. The sweets which could have costed him 500 bucks before would cost him 600 bucks. This would surely impact on his monthly budget. To conclude, sudden surge in the price of food which are not nutritious does not change the minds of people who devour them instead it would impact there savings.
Nowadays, the consumption of
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fast
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food
is becoming
increasingly
popular,
even though
it has
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many
side effects.
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People
are
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so
addicted to eat
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junk
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food
that raising tax on them would not bring any
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change
in the habits.
As well
as it could
further
bring financial problems to that individual. This essay will discuss why imposing higher tax is not beneficial to the society.

Firstly
, if once human being
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got
habituated to eat
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fast
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food
, it is
totally
uncontrollable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
that person from eating it. On biological perspective, eating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
junk
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
releases oxytocin
also
called as a happy hormone which is what
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keeps
us from eating sugary dishes again and again.
For example
, Andhra Pradesh stands
first
in diabetic related issues, although knowing this fact
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people
in this region has high sugary diet. According to
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a research
on diabetic patients it
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clear
that, even after knowing the fact that they have type 2 diabetics, there cravings to consume sweet dishes did not
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stop
.

Secondly
, raising taxes on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
junk
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
could lead to financial trouble in the long term owing to the fact that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
junk
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
has become part of everyone's life in this modern era.
For instance
, a person who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
sweets, would
obviously
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
them
even though
there is a raise in the price. The sweets which could have costed him 500 bucks
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before
would cost him 600 bucks. This would
surely
impact on his monthly budget.

To conclude
, sudden surge in the price of
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food
which are not nutritious does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the minds of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who devour them
instead
it would impact
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there
savings.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, the consumption of fast food is becoming increasingly popular, even though it has many side effects.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
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