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Nowadays some parents provide all requirements of children immediately, and children are allowed to do everything without any restriction.

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Nowadays some parents provide all requirements of children immediately, and children are allowed to do everything without any restriction. This parenting method has plenty of strict critics because children never learn their achievements are directly related to their efforts. In fact, after passing childish they are still completely dependent adolescents in the society. It is evident, raising a child needs a targeted plan, and doesn't take place just by meeting their all requirements. All psychologists believe parents should meet initial needs of children at first such as food, health, education and clothing, but other requirements such as high-tech toys or laptop and others have to be provided based on their efforts at their studies. Moreover, Families can teach children saving money in order to buy something for themselves. First, children have to gather their daily money. After a period, when the child has enough money can buy that thing. A part of the prices could be provided by family directly, as well. Indeed, children have to consider a plan for each purpose at their lives. According to official resources we are facing a generation that is growing up with low patience, and can't afford social challenges. Providing all of their demands has dramatically induced the instant gratification. Defining deadline for each target is unacceptable by children because everything has been accessible. Finally, this impatient generation doesn't know meeting needs is a slow and arduous process. Another significant and negative impact of buying eveything for children is the independency concept that has been neglected. When a child become an adolescent is not able to prepar his primary needs without his family. That is why numerous young people will be independent after years such as at their thertieth. In conclusion, preparing whatever children want is considered an appropriate reaction to their demands because they never learn success is a slow and complex process. Children have to work persistently for achievements.
Nowadays
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parents provide all requirements of
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children
immediately, and
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children
are
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allowed
to do everything without any restriction. This parenting method has
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plenty
of strict critics
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because
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children
never learn their achievements are
directly
related to their efforts. In fact, after passing childish they are
still
completely dependent adolescents in the society.

It is evident, raising a child
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needs
a targeted plan, and doesn't take place
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just
by meeting their all requirements. All psychologists believe parents should
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meet
initial
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needs
of
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children
at
first
such as food, health, education and clothing,
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but
other requirements such as high-tech toys or laptop
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and others
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have to
be provided
based on their efforts at their studies.
Moreover
, Families can teach
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children
saving money in order to
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buy
something for themselves.
First
,
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children
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have to
gather their daily money. After a period, when the child has
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enough
money can
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buy
that thing. A part of the prices could
be provided
by family
directly
,
as well
.
Indeed
,
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children
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have to
consider a plan for each purpose at their
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lives
.

According to official resources we are facing a generation
that is
growing up with low patience, and can't afford social challenges. Providing all of their demands has
dramatically
induced the instant gratification. Defining deadline for each target is unacceptable by
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children
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because
everything has been accessible.
Finally
, this impatient generation doesn't know meeting
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needs
is a slow and arduous process. Another significant and
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negative
impact of buying
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eveything
for
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children
is the
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independency
concept that has
been neglected
.
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When
a child become an adolescent is not able to
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prepar
his primary
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needs
without his family.
That is
why numerous young
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people
will be independent after years such as at their
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thertieth
.

In conclusion
, preparing whatever
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children
want
is considered
an appropriate reaction to their demands
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because
they never learn success is a slow and complex process.
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Children
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have to
work
persistently
for achievements.
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IELTS essay Nowadays some parents provide all requirements of children immediately, and children are allowed to do everything without any restriction.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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