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Nowadays, people waste a lot of food that is bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away? v.2

Nowadays, people waste a lot of food that is bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away? v. 2
Food is considered to be a basic need for humans to live a long healthy life; however, its wastage has become a controversial issue, thereby buying from the shops and restaurants, and further, the analyzation for the reasons and solutions is to be commenced in the subsequent paragraphs. The certain causes need to be considered, which seem to be responsible for this wastage of food, the first and foremost is excessive show off of money in the front of others as modern people tend to procure the food from shops and restaurants not only for satisfying their hunger but to attract the attention of others towards themselves in order to show their status; thus, they do not know the importance of food, and therefore, they keep on wasting it. Besides this, the proliferation of discounts on online food is a prominent cause of its wastage because people order more food items, while in actuality they are not able to finish their given food orders; eventually, such kind of choices lead to the wastage of food. The implementation of different measures may have fruitful results, which are immensely significant to solve the issue of food wastage. Firstly, government has to live up to their responsibility to make the people aware in terms of proper usage of the food, unless they are unable to eat; thereafter, it should rather be served to the poor people than throwing away, it is evident that the poor once does not have a capability to arrange the meal in a whole day. Secondly, people should have to start preparing domestic food because this food is less spicy as compared to outside food. In conclusion, purchasing food from the shops and restaurants cannot be considered negatively, but its usage should be in an appropriate way to avoid wastage.
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Food
is considered
to be a basic need for humans to
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live
a long healthy life;
however
, its
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wastage
has become a controversial issue, thereby buying from the shops and restaurants, and
further
, the
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analyzation
for the reasons and solutions is to
be commenced
in the subsequent paragraphs.

The certain causes need to
be considered
, which seem to be responsible for this
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wastage
of
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food
, the
first
and foremost is excessive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
off of money in the front of others as modern
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people
tend to procure the
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food
from shops and restaurants not
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only
for satisfying their hunger
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but
to attract the attention of others towards themselves in order to
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show
their status;
thus
, they do not know the importance of
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food
, and
therefore
, they
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keep
on wasting it.
Besides
this, the proliferation of discounts on online
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food
is a prominent cause of its
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wastage
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because
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people
order more
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food
items, while in actuality they are not able to finish their
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given
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food
orders;
eventually
, such kind of choices lead to the
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wastage
of food.

The implementation of
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different
measures may have fruitful results, which are
immensely
significant to solve the issue of
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food
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wastage
.
Firstly
,
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government
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has to
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live
up to their responsibility to
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make
the
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people
aware in terms of proper usage of the
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food
, unless they are unable to eat; thereafter, it should
rather
be served
to the poor
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people
than throwing away, it is evident that the poor once does not have a capability to arrange the meal in a whole day.
Secondly
,
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people
should
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have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
preparing domestic
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food
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
this
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food
is less spicy as compared to outside food.

In conclusion
, purchasing
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food
from the shops and restaurants cannot
be considered
negatively
,
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but
its usage should be
Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with the adverb for "appropriate"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an appropriate way
to avoid
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wastage
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays, people waste a lot of food that is bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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