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Nowadays, people are consuming more and more sugar based drinks.Why do they do so? suggest measure to solve the problem.

In the contemporary era, sugar based drinks reach at the peak of solding out and these drinks are in the pace of proliferating. This essay intends to analyse the cause of these problems and some measure to prevent these problems in subsequent paragraphs. First of all, I have several reasons for why people are drinking more sugar based drinks? They all knew that it’s unhealthy for their own health but significantly, they prefer drinking these types of drinks who consist lot of sugar. Firstly, These types of drinks have a splendid taste and it refresh our mouth as well as our mood. One specialty about this drink is that these kind of drinks have exquisite aroma in itself. The plethora of sugar in a drink is very catchy thing like people who tried first time now they are addicted to it. At present, any of us who don’t like to taste bitter. Everyone like a good taste. To exemplify, like me I never like sugar but when i tried sugar based drinks to be honest, I am very addicted to it. It feels like that hypotize me. Still, I don’t like sugar but i do like sugar based drinks. On the other hand, I have some reasons to alleviate these kind of cause of sugar drinks. Fristly, A company who is manufacturing these drinks must start adding less sugar. Every companies should take decision on it. Secondly, all people know that lots of sugar cause lots of diseases and have a distinguished impact in our body. Several diseases like high blood pressure, increase in fat, etcetera. We should avoid these drinks so, we can desert these diseases. Apart from this, all people should have only consisted of less sugar. Try to rid these problems slowly and steadily. To bring the curtain down, people who are addicted to this high sugar drink. They should overcome addiction. Earlier mentioned diseases will cause to the adolescent as well as adults and certainly old people. From today, people should make a resolution of not having a plethora of sugar-based drinks.
In the contemporary era,
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sugar
based
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drinks
reach at the peak of
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solding
out and these
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drinks
are in the pace of proliferating. This essay intends to
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analyse
the
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cause
of these problems and
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some
measure to
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prevent
these problems in subsequent paragraphs.

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First of all
, I have several reasons for why
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people
are drinking more
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sugar
based
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drinks
? They all knew that it’s unhealthy for their
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own
health
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but
significantly
, they prefer drinking these types of
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drinks
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who
consist
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lot of
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sugar
.
Firstly
, These types of
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drinks
have a splendid
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taste and
it
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refresh
our mouth
as well
as our mood. One specialty about this
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drink
is that
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these kind
of
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drinks
have exquisite aroma in itself. The plethora of
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sugar
in a
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drink
is
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very
catchy thing like
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people
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who
tried
first
time
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now
they
are addicted
to it. At present, any of us
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who
don’t like to taste bitter. Everyone like a
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good
taste. To exemplify, like
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me
I never like
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sugar
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but
when
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i
tried
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sugar
based
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drinks
to be honest, I am
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very
addicted to it. It feels like that
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hypotize
me.
Still
, I don’t like
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sugar
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but
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i
do like
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sugar
based
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drinks
.
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, I have
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some
reasons to alleviate
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these kind
of
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cause
of
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sugar
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drinks
.
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Fristly
, A
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company
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who
is manufacturing these
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drinks
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must
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start
adding less
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sugar
. Every
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companies
should take decision on it.
Secondly
, all
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people
know that lots of
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sugar
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cause
lots of
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diseases
and have a distinguished impact in our body. Several
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diseases
like high blood pressure, increase in
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fat
, etcetera. We should avoid these
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drinks
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so
, we can desert these
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diseases
. Apart from this, all
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people
should have
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only
consisted of less
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sugar
. Try to rid these problems
slowly
and
steadily
.

To bring the curtain down,
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people
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who
are addicted
to this high
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sugar
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drink
. They should overcome addiction. Earlier mentioned
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diseases
will
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cause
to the adolescent
as well
as adults and
certainly
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old
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people
. From
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today
,
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people
should
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make
a resolution of not having a plethora of sugar-based
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drinks
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, people are consuming more and more sugar based drinks. Why do they do so? suggest measure to solve the problem.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
346 words
5.5
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