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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this positive or negative development.

Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this positive or negative development. NJnb
The use of unrestricted and unstructured to connect in media social also has a negative impact on family and social life. Especially for the young. For example, they necessarily use their laptops or mobile phones to chat with their friends and establish contact with them. This can cause their relationships with family members and relatives their as well as tangible social ties also deteriorate. In our opinion, we strongly disagree that choosing to socialize online is better than face to face because there will be some serious problems that will arise one of which is that it can lead to isolation between the individual self and the public. For example, university students. Previously they were exposed to face-to-face outdoor activities go out to meet friends in classrooms, libraries, or cafés but because of the effects of the pandemic, where’s now students or people prefer to stay at home alone or chatting online and classes online. However, it is highly unnatural that this activity is treated in our society today as it can affect the development relations of the country. Not only that, but this isolation is also unhealthy and sometimes it can cause depression in society. As a result, we wholeheartedly disagree with the statement above that more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. This is a negative development in modern society. First, socializing with people online can be dangerous. Not only that, but it can also take the life of an individual. As we all know, nowadays there are far too many imposters masquerading as friends on the internet who are also liars and untrustworthy individuals. For example, a scammer. Therefore, as a society, we should always be careful of the people we encounter on the socialize online. Other than that, the use of unrestricted and unstructured to connect in media social also has a negative impact on family and social life. Especially for the young. For example, they necessarily use their laptops or mobile phones to chat with their friends and establish contact with them. This can cause their relationships with family members and relatives their as well as tangible social ties also deteriorate
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also
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negative
impact on
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family
and
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social
life.
Especially
for the young. For
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example
, they
necessarily
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use
their laptops or mobile phones to chat with their
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friends
and establish contact with them. This can cause their relationships with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
members and relatives their
as well
as tangible
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
ties
also
deteriorate.

In our opinion, we
strongly
disagree that choosing to socialize
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online
is better than
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face
to
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face
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because
there will be
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some
serious problems that will arise one of which is that it can lead to isolation between the individual self and the public. For
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example
, university students. Previously they
were exposed
to face-to-face outdoor activities go out to
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meet
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friends
in classrooms, libraries, or cafés
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but
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because
of the effects of the pandemic, where’s
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now
students or
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people
prefer to stay at home alone or chatting
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online
and classes
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online
.
However
, it is
highly
unnatural that this activity
is treated
in our society
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today
as it can affect the development relations of the country. Not
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only
that,
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but
this isolation is
also
unhealthy and
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sometimes
it can cause depression in society.
As a result
, we
wholeheartedly
disagree with the statement above that more
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people
are choosing to socialize
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online
rather
than
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face
to
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face
. This is a
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negative
development in modern society.

First
, socializing with
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people
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online
can be
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dangerous
. Not
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only
that,
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but
it can
also
take the life of an individual. As we all know, nowadays there are far too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
imposters masquerading as
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friends
on the internet who are
also
liars and untrustworthy individuals. For
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example
, a scammer.
Therefore
, as a society, we should always be careful of the
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people
we encounter on
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the socialize
online.

Other than that, the
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use
of unrestricted and unstructured to connect in media
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social
also
has a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
life.
Especially
for the young. For
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
example
, they
necessarily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their laptops or mobile phones to chat with their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
and establish contact with them. This can cause their relationships with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
members and relatives their
as well
as tangible
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
ties
also
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deteriorate
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IELTS essay Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. Is this positive or negative development.

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