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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? MYON
This topic is frequently discussed by the people. Nowadays, men and women decide to delay their parenthood later in their life. In my opinion, I consider that having a baby later brings more drawbacks than compared to the benefits. This essay will examine both advantages and disadvantages, as well as, provide a logical conclusion. One main merit of getting children later is having a better working career for their life. It is undeniable fact that parenthood can be hurdle for their personal development. Undoubtedly, if they have a baby, they should take care of them, thus, people can not devote sufficient time for their jobs. Moreover, a survey conducted in Baku among the populations who were expert in their fields, they mentioned that they didn’t have a baby yet. Therefore, some people postpone their parenthood in order to improve themselves. On the other hand, I would like to mention that getting babies later leads to some diseases. Pointless to mention, later pregnancy is highly denied by the doctors, because sich children are born. Surely, they emphasised that their pregnancy period can be challenging and in some cases, their children die in this preiod. Hence it will be detrimental for our next generation and their thrivement. That is why, delaying the feeling of parenhood will damage both their children and themselves. Additional drawback is gap of the ages between parents and their children. As we know, high age difference causes to weakining the communcation and understanding with each other. Various generation leads to formulate different opinions and tastes, as well as their thinking style will extremely different from each other. Therefore, later parenthood creates controversy opinions between them and their children. In conclusion, Nevertheless having kids later can be beneficial in their personal development, I strongly believe that this issue will create more disadvantages compared to the merits.
This topic is
frequently
discussed by the
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people
. Nowadays,
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men
and women decide to delay their parenthood
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later
in their life. In my opinion, I consider that having a baby
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later
brings more drawbacks than compared to the benefits. This essay will examine both advantages and disadvantages,
as well
as, provide a logical conclusion.

One main merit of getting
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children
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later
is having a better working career for their life. It is undeniable fact that parenthood can be
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hurdle
for their personal development.
Undoubtedly
, if they have a baby, they should take care of them,
thus
,
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people
can not devote sufficient time for their jobs.
Moreover
, a survey conducted in Baku among the populations who were expert in their fields, they mentioned that they didn’t have a baby
yet
.
Therefore
,
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some
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people
postpone their parenthood in order to
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improve
themselves.

On the other hand
, I would like to mention that getting
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babies
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later
leads to
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some
diseases. Pointless to mention,
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later
pregnancy is
highly
denied by the doctors,
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because
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sich
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children
are born
.
Surely
, they
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emphasised
that their pregnancy period can be challenging and in
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some
cases, their
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children
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die
in this
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preiod
.
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Hence
it will be detrimental for our
next
generation and their
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thrivement
.
That is
why, delaying the feeling of
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parenhood
will damage both their
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children
and themselves.

Additional drawback is gap of the ages between parents and their
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children
. As we know, high age difference causes to
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weakining
the
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communcation
and understanding with each other. Various generation leads to formulate
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different
opinions and tastes,
as well
as their thinking style will
extremely
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different
from each other.
Therefore
,
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later
parenthood creates controversy opinions between them and their children.

In conclusion
,
Nevertheless
having kids
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later
can be beneficial in their personal development, I
strongly
believe that this issue will create more disadvantages compared to the merits.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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5 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
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