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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. ONk3
In modern era people like to travel around the world for rejuvenate. However, a number of people argues that it is negatively affected the nations by the travelers. I partially agreed with the argument that tourism provides benefits to the nations and will be discussed in the looming paragraphs. First of first, tourism prevents the economic development for the nation. For instance travelers come to the nation and spend their money in hotels, restaurants and shopping. Due to which, it privileged to the growth of the nation. In addition, it creates the more opportunities of employment in the nation. Finally both the aspects give the ample justice to worldwide tourists have positive impact on the nation. Although, tourism is quite beneficial for countries, a number of demerits are could not be ignorable. Tourism is lead to crime and prostitution in the nation. For example, in metro cities night life and beer cafés are relay on the tourists. Due to which, it causes drugs transactions, prostitutions and crimes in the cities.
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people
like to travel around the world for rejuvenate.
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people
argues that it is
negatively
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affected
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nations
by the travelers. I
partially
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agreed
with the argument that
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tourism
provides benefits to the
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nations
and will
be discussed
in the looming paragraphs.

First
of
first
,
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tourism
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prevents
the economic development for the
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nation
.
For instance
travelers
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come
to the
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nation
and spend their money in hotels, restaurants and shopping. Due to which, it privileged to the growth of the
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nation
.
In addition
, it creates the more opportunities of employment in the
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nation
.
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Finally
both the aspects give the ample justice to worldwide tourists have
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positive
impact on the nation.

Although,
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tourism
is quite beneficial for countries, a number of demerits are could not be ignorable.
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Tourism
is lead to crime and prostitution in the
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nation
.
For example
, in metro cities
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night life
and beer cafés are relay on the tourists. Due to which, it causes drugs transactions,
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prostitutions
and crimes in the cities.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
170 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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