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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can cause lack of sleep, what can be done about lack of sleep

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can cause lack of sleep, what can be done about lack of sleep oJmV
In recent times, sleep deprivation has been a major complain of people. It is generally thought that lack of sleep can result in health related issues as well as altering physical appearance, however, there is a solution to this problem, this is medical treatment and change in lifestyle. Problems associated with less sleeping hours are high blood pressure, diabetes, heart attack, heart failure or stroke. Lack of sleep could be due to heavy workload, hence, leaving the body sore. A sore body would find difficulty sleeping, this has however, caused people to have medical conditions. For instance, a plumber who has to fix pipes in a new house everyday would definitely come home extremely fatigued and sore making sleep become a problem. In addition, seeking medical attention when issues of sleeplessness occurs is paramount. Going further, lack of sleep can tamper with the physical appearance of an individual. People who sleep less tend to look tacky and have wrinkled skin making them look aged than they should. However, the only profer solution would be a change in lifestyle. For example, a woman of age 40 working in a bakery for 17 hours daily is bound to look tacky and aged than her age. To conclude, sleeplessness does not only lead to an unhealthy individual but also alters the physical appearance of such person. This, solutions like seeking medical attention and having a change of living is important.
In recent times,
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deprivation has been a major complain of
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people
. It is
generally
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thought
that lack of
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sleep
can result in health related issues
as well
as altering physical appearance,
however
, there is a solution to this problem, this is
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medical
treatment and
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change
in lifestyle.

Problems associated with less sleeping hours are high blood pressure, diabetes, heart attack, heart failure or stroke. Lack of
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sleep
could be due to heavy workload,
hence
, leaving the body sore. A sore body would find difficulty sleeping, this has
however
, caused
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people
to have
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medical
conditions.
For instance
, a plumber who
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has to
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fix
pipes in a new
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house
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everyday
would definitely
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come
home
extremely
fatigued and sore making
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sleep
become a problem.
In addition
, seeking
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medical
attention when issues of sleeplessness occurs is paramount.

Going
further
, lack of
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sleep
can tamper with the physical appearance of an individual.
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People
who
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sleep
less tend to look tacky and have wrinkled skin making them look aged than they should.
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profer
solution would be a
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change
in lifestyle.
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, a woman of age 40 working in a bakery for 17 hours daily
is bound
to look tacky and
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aged
than her age.

To conclude
, sleeplessness does not
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only
lead to an unhealthy individual
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but
also
alters the physical appearance of such person. This, solutions like seeking
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medical
attention and having a
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change
of living is
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can cause lack of sleep, what can be done about lack of sleep

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