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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep.what problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. what problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep K8X0
In this generation, one of the most common problems is lack of sleep and complaining about the fact is also common. Below I will narrate the causes of sleep and why more people are prone to this condition these days. First of all, one of the main reason of lacking of sleep is over exposure to rays that are emitted by the screen of Mobiles, Laptop, Computers and last but not the least Television. As people have less place to play and spend their leisure time at home the only thing to be dependable on is these medias. In addition, kids and youth are also attending classes which is about 7-8hours long in front of a screen nowadays. As a result, nervous system stimulates to induce sleep. There are ways to mitigate these problems. One of the ways is to keep distance from any of the screen after classes. During leisure time people should plan to play more games outside of computers with family or friends or hang out and enjoy the world together with family family and friends. Secondly, another outstanding cause of sleep apnea is stress and excessive workload. Humans are emotional species although the emotion is controllable. But when emotion go out of hand because work pressure is increasing at work which goes round and round inside head even after reaching home. In addition, there might be something going on in ones life that causes them to be emotionally vulnerable which is basically related to the people around them such as friends and family. People must learn how to keep personal and professional life in order to keep problems separate and to keep the solutions separate. As a result, people can go through the problem one by one and try to sought out each at a different time. They should not think about all the problems at once because that will suppress the brain to think about the solution. Another interesting fact to reduce stress is practicing yoga. Daily 20-30 minutes of meditation can help to get rid of stress and also helps to lead a healthy life. In addition, exercise can also help reducing the stress by calming the brain. To sum up, the sleep apnea is a real thing for this generation. The problem such as workload, stress and exposure to radiation are a daily thing about life which will rise and rise immensely as we grow. We cannot escape the problem instead we can fight it applying some of the tips that is discussed above.
In this generation, one of the most common
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problems
is lack of
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sleep
and complaining about the fact is
also
common. Below I will narrate the causes of
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sleep
and why more
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people
are prone to this condition these days.

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First of all
, one of the main reason of lacking of
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sleep
is over exposure to rays that
are emitted
by the screen of Mobiles, Laptop, Computers and last
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but
not the least Television. As
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people
have less place to play and spend their leisure time at home the
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only
thing to be dependable on is these medias.
In addition
, kids and youth are
also
attending classes which is about 7-8hours long in front of a screen nowadays.
As a result
, nervous system stimulates to induce
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sleep
. There are ways to mitigate these
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problems
. One of the ways is to
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keep
distance from any of the screen after classes. During leisure time
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people
should plan to play more games outside of computers with
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family
or friends or hang out and enjoy the world together with
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family
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family
and friends.

Secondly
, another outstanding cause of
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sleep
apnea is
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stress
and excessive workload. Humans are emotional species although the emotion is controllable.
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when emotion go out of hand
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because
work pressure is increasing at work which goes round and round inside head even after reaching home.
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, there might be something going on in
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life
that causes them to be
emotionally
vulnerable which is
basically
related to the
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people
around them such as friends and
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family
.
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People
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must
learn how to
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keep
personal and professional
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life
in order to
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keep
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problems
separate and to
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keep
the solutions separate.
As a result
,
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people
can go through the
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problem
one by one and try to sought out each at a
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different
time. They should not
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think
about all the
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problems
at once
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because
that will suppress the brain to
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think
about the solution. Another interesting fact to
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reduce
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stress
is practicing yoga. Daily 20-30 minutes of meditation can
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get
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stress
and
also
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helps
to lead a healthy
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life
.
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, exercise can
also
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help
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reducing
the
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stress
by calming the brain.

To sum up, the
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sleep
apnea is a real thing for this generation. The
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problem
such as workload,
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stress
and exposure to radiation are a daily thing about
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life
which will rise and rise
immensely
as we grow. We cannot escape the
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problem
instead
we can fight it applying
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some of the
tips that
is discussed
above.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. what problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep

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