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Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep 7663
It is believed that a significant number of people tend to suffer from the problem connected to a lack of sleep. There are mood swings that may occur as a consequence of such a common issue in today’s world. Therefore, specific measures should be done, such as time-limitation of electronic devices we use on a regular basis. To start with, it is clear that brainwork depends of how much sleep do one get each day throughout the whole life. Consequently, if this vital element of human being is unforeseen, the nerve system commences to lack energy. And as a result, an everydayness of life becomes less pleasant and more stressful. Moreover, according to a recent university study, there has been observed a clear connection between a sleep deficiency and a deleterious mental illness known as depression. Now, with regards to a majority of individuals, they are used to take an advantage especially of their mobile phones, overlooking time spent on it. It proves the points that only a small group of people do actually acknowledge an importance of steering clear gadgets in favour of relaxation and sleeping as well. As an example, a recently published research has revealed that users of a very much popular application named Instagram usually go on it starting from 7 o’clock in the evening and ending at the early morning the other day. Although a usage of gadgets is an inevitable part of everyone’s work and leisure time, it does harm human health if is not limited enough to keep up neurological balance in our nerve system. Provided that an above-mentioned requirement is performed, not only won’t a lack of sleep be a problem anymore, but it also won’t entail to much more harsh repercussions as mental illnesses.
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people
tend to suffer from the problem connected to a lack of
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. There are mood swings that may occur as a consequence of such a common issue in
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today
’s world.
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do one
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each day throughout the whole life.
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deficiency and a deleterious mental illness known as depression.

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much popular application named Instagram
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enough
to
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keep
up neurological balance in our nerve system. Provided that an above-mentioned requirement
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won’t a lack of
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be a problem anymore,
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won’t entail to much more harsh repercussions as mental illnesses.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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