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Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? PygJ
In the current era, work as a freelancer is treading among youngsters. Many young people prefer to work for themselves rather than work as employees in a firm. This essay will discuss benefits and drawbacks of self-employment. Putting light on advantages of self-employed. First and foremost is, individuals can do their work with freedom with their rules and regulation, no obstacles by anyone such as manager or boss. To add, youngster, begin their own startup in highly competitive market, where a person needs a higher degree and work experience to get a job and work as an employee in a company. In addition, entrepreneurs can earn money faster and much than company employees, also they work in their own time and place and save money from not commute from home to workplace. Secondly, self-employed persons have more confidence and good communication skill, they are energetic and passionate about their works. However, there are some disadvantages of work as a self-employed. To begin with, a novice business person needs financial supports to start his/her startup and it cannot be getting easily from banks. Furthermore, there is no guarantee of profit in business at end of the month and sometimes clients can refuse to give their works to new business firm due to less experience. Next, recession can impact on self-employment and persons would loss in their startup, while company employees can get a paycheck at the end of the month and have a secure job. For instance, during corona pandemic, many startup companies close due to lack of financial supports. Additionally, self-employed people need to compromise with their family and friends commitment, because of focus on their business and complete works on given timeline. In conclusion, it can be said that there are many pros of self-employment such as more money, gain experience, improve their skills and freedom to work. Whereas, there is no guarantee of success in self business and an individual will face more struggle than an employee.
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in a firm. This essay will discuss benefits and drawbacks of self-employment.

Putting light on advantages of self-employed.
First
and foremost is, individuals can do their
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work
with freedom with their
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rules
and regulation, no obstacles by anyone such as manager or boss. To
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add
, youngster,
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begin
their
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own
startup in
highly
competitive market, where a
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person
needs a higher degree and
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work
experience to
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get
a job and
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work
as an
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employee
in a
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company
.
In addition
, entrepreneurs can earn money faster and much than
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company
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employees
,
also
they
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work
in their
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own
time and place and save money from not commute from home to workplace.
Secondly
, self-employed
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persons
have more confidence and
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good
communication
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skill
, they are energetic and passionate about their works.

However
, there are
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disadvantages of
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as
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a self-employed
. To
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with, a novice
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business
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person
needs financial supports to
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start
his/her startup and it cannot be getting
easily
from banks.
Furthermore
, there is no guarantee of profit in
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business
at
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end
of the month and
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clients can refuse to give their works to new
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business
firm due to less experience.
Next
, recession can impact on self-employment and
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persons
would
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loss
in their startup, while
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company
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employees
can
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get
a paycheck at the
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end
of the month and have a secure job.
For instance
, during corona pandemic,
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startup
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close due to lack of financial supports.
Additionally
, self-employed
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people
need to compromise with their family and friends commitment,
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because
of focus on their
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business
and complete works on
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given
timeline.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
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pros of self-employment such as more money, gain experience,
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improve
their
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skills
and freedom to
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work
. Whereas, there is no guarantee of success in self
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business
and an individual will face more struggle than an
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employee
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6.0
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