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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization 58MD
The subject which is set as the aim of this passage is called employment and going deeper through details, the main issue to declare is self-employment. So, what is self-employment, we the normal people living in society, without any professional knowledge of researches, may not be capable of presenting an exhaustive concept. By considering what has been said, what is self-employment’s meaning in your word and what are the cases to cause such an event? At first, to deal with the reasons, various items can persuade an individual not to work for a company or an organization, such as income, family circumstance, personal favors, job security and etc. As a person living among different pupils in society, there is one main element that drives a person’s mind in selecting a job, and that is money. Although, it’s been said “Money is not an issue”, I can state that It has always been an issue. Notwithstanding what people may desire, usually it’s the money which rules. In second, like every other event, both advantages and disadvantages emerge by self-employment revealing. To start by its benefits, its easily understood that no one else will construct his or her own financial empire on other’s efforts and endures in severe situations. Hence you are the master of your sea. On the other side, as the socialist and those who works on human resources say, people begin to isolate and staying away from each other however human being is remarked as naturally social habitant. To sum up, I think we are in essential need of balance between income and team works in order to deal with both employment and self-employment.
The subject which
is set
as the aim of this passage
is called
employment and going deeper through
details
, the main issue to declare is self-employment.
So
, what is self-employment, we the normal
people
living in society, without any professional knowledge of researches, may not be capable of presenting an exhaustive concept. By considering what has
been said
, what is self-employment’s meaning in your word and what are the cases to cause such an
event
?

At
first
, to deal with the reasons, various items can persuade an individual not to work for a
company
or an organization, such as income, family circumstance, personal favors, job security
and etc
. As a person living among
different
pupils in society, there is one main element that drives a person’s mind in selecting a job, and
that is
money. Although, it’s
been said
“Money is not an issue”, I can state that It has always been an issue. Notwithstanding what
people
may desire,
usually
it’s the money which
rules
.

In second, like every
other
event
, both advantages and disadvantages emerge by self-employment revealing. To
start
by its benefits, its
easily
understood that no one else will construct
his or her
own
financial empire on
other’s
efforts and endures in severe situations.
Hence
you are the master of your sea. On the
other
side, as the socialist and those who works on human resources say,
people
begin
to isolate and staying away from each
other
however
human being
is remarked
as
naturally
social habitant.

To sum up, I
think
we are in essential need of balance between income and team works in order to deal with both employment and self-employment.
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IELTS essay Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization

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  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
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