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Nowadays, families are not as close as they used to be. what are the causes and how can we turn around it.

Nowadays, families are not as close as they used to be. what are the causes and how can we turn around it. Lrqar
Gone are the days when people had harmonious relationship with each others in the family. At present, the affection between family members is disappearing due to changes in the lifestyle which can be harmful for modern societies. Here, i would like to establish causes and solutions to address this worrying concern. There are manifold causes behind this problem. First and foremost, migration to other places for jobs, education, business and employment is leading to disintegration of joint families into nuclear families. As a result, people have less intimacy in the families because of living. . .
Gone
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are
the days when
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people
had harmonious relationship with each
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others
in the
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family
. At present, the affection between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
members is disappearing due to
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changes
in the lifestyle which can be harmful for modern societies. Here,
Did you mean "I"?
i
would like to establish causes and solutions to address this worrying concern.

There are manifold causes behind this problem.
First
and foremost, migration to other places for jobs, education, business and employment is leading to disintegration of joint
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families
into nuclear
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families
.
As a result
,
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people
have less intimacy in the
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families
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because
of living.
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.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, families are not as close as they used to be. what are the causes and how can we turn around it.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
96 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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