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Shopping has developed from a necessary activity to a kind of entertainment To what extent do you agree or disagree What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development Give reasons for your answer and examples from your own knowledge and experie

Shopping has developed from a necessary activity to a kind of entertainment What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development Give reasons for your answer and examples from your own knowledge and experie KwYa0
Advancement is leading to materialistic attitudes of people in this modern world. Presently, the prevalence of shopping is gaining ground radically. Undenaibly, It has turned from needed activity to form of amusement. Here, I would like to accord with given statement along with pros and cons of this phenomenon. There are manifold points to support my point of view. First and foremost, window shopping is striding among people on account of shopping malls and showrooms in order to pass leisure time. For instance, people visit to watch movies in multiplex theaters where they have to wait aft. . .
Advancement is leading to materialistic attitudes of
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people
in this modern world.
Presently
, the prevalence of shopping is gaining ground
radically
.
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Undenaibly
, It has turned from needed activity to form of amusement. Here, I would like to accord with
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given
statement along with pros and cons of this phenomenon.

There are manifold points to support my point of view.
First
and foremost, window shopping is striding among
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
on account of shopping malls and showrooms in order to pass leisure time.
For instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
visit to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
movies in multiplex theaters where they
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have to
wait aft.
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.
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IELTS essay Shopping has developed from a necessary activity to a kind of entertainment What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development Give reasons for your answer and examples from your own knowledge and experie

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