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Nowadays automation is being used to drive cars. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or a negative development? v.1

Nowadays automation is being used to drive cars. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or a negative development? v. 1
These day vehicles are being driven through the use of artificial intelligence. This is occurring because technology is being used to reduce the number of road accidents, and it should be seen as a positive development since it helps in saving many lives. Over the years, the number of road accidents has only been increasing. To combat this issue, some of the major automobile companies have launched cars with artificial intelligence. This technology will notify drivers of possible threats that they might encounter while driving. For example, Tesla has launched a car that uses artificial intelligence to inform the driver of pedestrians and vehicles that are up to 500 metres ahead. This feature will help drivers stay alert and let them know what is ahead. The use of artificial intelligence in cars should be welcomed because it can greatly reduce the number of fatalities that occur due to human errors. Most of the road accidents that take place are because of human negligence and being distracted. With the help of artificial intelligence, humans will be able to minimize traffic accidents as it will help them navigate safely. For example, if a person is speaking to someone else while driving, they might be not be able to completely focus on the road. In such situations, artificial intelligence will immediately notify them of possible dangers ahead. In conclusion, artificial intelligence is an incredible development and its usage should be encouraged as it reduces the number of road accidents and helps in saving people's lives.
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seen
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positive
development since it
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helps
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lives
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Over the years, the
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has
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been increasing. To combat this issue,
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major automobile
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companies
have launched cars with artificial
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intelligence
. This technology will notify drivers of possible threats that they might encounter while driving.
For example
, Tesla has launched a car that
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uses
artificial
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intelligence
to inform the driver of pedestrians and vehicles that are up to 500
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metres
ahead. This feature will
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drivers stay alert and
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let
them know what is ahead.

The
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in cars should
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reduce
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of fatalities that occur due to human errors. Most of the
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road
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accidents
that take place are
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because
of human negligence and
being distracted
. With the
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help
of artificial
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intelligence
, humans will be able to minimize traffic
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accidents
as it will
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help
them navigate
safely
.
For example
, if a person is speaking to someone else while driving, they might be not
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be
able to completely focus on the
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road
. In such situations, artificial
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intelligence
will immediately notify them of possible
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dangers
ahead.

In conclusion
, artificial
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intelligence
is an incredible development and its usage should
be encouraged
as it
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reduces
the
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number
of
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road
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accidents
and
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helps
in saving
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people
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lives
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IELTS essay Nowadays automation is being used to drive cars. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or a negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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