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Nowadays artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars. Why is this happening? Is it a positive or negative development? v.3

Nowadays artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars. Why is this happening? Is it a positive or negative development? v. 3
The prevalence of unhealthy meals is a serious issue today owing to the health complications which could arise from these meals. However, many people have found it challenging to regularly eat the appropriate diet essential for health. This essay will consider the main barriers to maintaining a healthy diet before proposing two promising solutions. Perhaps the most important cause of difficulty in eating healthy meals regularly is the effect of peer pressure. For some people, friends and colleagues around them choose delicacies that are not ideal for their health and close association with such individuals could negatively influence a person's choice of food. For instance, a person may not want to be different from peers and could be tempted to join in eating certain foods despite having knowledge of the harmful effects of such diets. Another key factor is the effect of advertisement. The adverts on the mass and social media usually promotes foods that have high amount of sugar, fats and salts. These meals are attractive and the public is neither informed of the deleterious consequences of regularly consuming them like the development of obesity, diabetes and heart disease nor are the nutritional contents of these meals revealed. Thus, people are easily influenced to eat junk foods. Fortunately, however, there are two promising solutions to this problem. First of all, people should be regularly educated on the dangers of unhealthy foods. Timely information targeted at people in age groups that can be easily influenced such as teenagers would create a general need to eat healthy meals. Secondly, food adverts should reveal both the nutritional contents of meals as well as the health complications that could arise from some diets, which would invigorate decisions to avoid meals that can adversely affect health. In conclusion, the challenge facing a routine of healthy diets arise because of peer pressure and inappropriate food advertisements. Regular education of the public and ensuring food adverts enlighten people about the contents and dangers of various foods would help people maintain eating healthy meals.
The prevalence of unhealthy
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meals
is a serious issue
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today
owing to the
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health
complications which could arise from these
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meals
.
However
,
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many
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people
have found it challenging to
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regularly
eat the appropriate diet essential for
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health
. This essay will consider the main barriers to maintaining a
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healthy
diet
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before
proposing two promising solutions.

Perhaps the most
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important
cause of difficulty in eating
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healthy
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meals
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regularly
is the effect of peer pressure. For
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some
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people
, friends and colleagues around them choose delicacies that are not ideal for their
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health
and close association with such individuals could
negatively
influence a person's choice of
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food
.
For instance
, a person may not want to be
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different
from peers and could
be tempted
to
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join
in eating certain
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foods
despite having knowledge of the harmful effects of such diets. Another key factor is the effect of advertisement. The adverts on the mass and social media
usually
promotes
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foods
that have high amount of sugar, fats and salts. These
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meals
are attractive and the public is neither informed of the deleterious consequences of
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regularly
consuming them like the development of obesity, diabetes and heart disease nor are the nutritional contents of these
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meals
revealed.
Thus
,
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people
are
easily
influenced to eat junk foods.

Fortunately
,
however
, there are two promising solutions to this problem.
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First of all
,
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people
should be
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regularly
educated on the
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dangers
of unhealthy
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foods
. Timely information targeted at
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people
in age groups that can be
easily
influenced such as
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teenagers
would create a general need to eat
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healthy
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meals
.
Secondly
,
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food
adverts should reveal both the nutritional contents of
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meals
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as well as
the
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health
complications that could arise from
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some
diets, which would invigorate decisions to avoid
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meals
that can
adversely
affect health.

In conclusion
, the challenge facing a routine of
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healthy
diets arise
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because
of peer pressure and inappropriate
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food
advertisements. Regular education of the public and ensuring
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food
adverts enlighten
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people
about the contents and
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dangers
of various
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foods
would
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help
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people
maintain eating
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healthy
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meals
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Nowadays artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars. Why is this happening? Is it a positive or negative development? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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