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Now a days people have adopted an unhealthy lifestyle. Why do you think this is and how can this problem be solved?

Now a days people have adopted an unhealthy lifestyle. Why do you think this is and how can this problem be solved? PDLX
It would not be irrefutable to say that the world has been attaining an unhealthy lifestyle in recent years. However, it may have various reasons but technology development and busy schedules can be considered as the major causes. Since this requires further elaboration, this essay will shed light in detail on both these reasons leading to the resolution in impending paragraphs. To begin with, people are being unhealthy is a result of numerous reasons. First and foremost, the advancement in technology is however providing the comfort to the people but indirectly, propelling them towards unhealthy daily routines. To elaborate, ever since technology came into place with alluring comfort such as video games, television, travelling conveyance and what not, have turned people’s routine into sedentary lifestyle. Resultantly, public have started avoiding physical activities in every case and have made themselves addicted to these comfortable facilities which lead them to unhealthy lifestyle. Furthermore, apart from technology enhancement, busy schedule of people is also making their lifestyle unhealthy. To substantiate, as almost everyone is engrossed in their mundane affairs whether in jobs or other sort of work, is not being capable of managing the lack of time and have to consume fast food on daily basis. Thus, the world has witnessed that unhygienic food is making people worst on their health. For instance, one of my colleagues is possessing very unhealthy lifestyle because of his swamped routine. Since, he is doing two jobs simultaneously and cannot get enough time to cook for himself, he has to consume frozen food all week and adopted unhealthy lifestyle. Regardless of above causes, there are numerous ways by which people can get rid of the unhealthy lifestyle. Most importantly, public should be taught on merits and demerits of technology over-reliance. Owing to this cause, government or society’s leading regime should adopt a system of organizing educational seminars in order to keep people acknowledged regarding the causes and suicidal outcomes of unhealthy lifestyle. Nevertheless, it is public own preference that how much they should rely on the technology but at some point it becomes necessary to educate them and save them from unhealthy lifestyle. For example, as per survey conducted by WHO in Melbourne in Australia in 2018 revealed that since the authorities had started lecturing public in reference to pros and cons, they had been seeing people smart efforts towards quitting unhealthy way of living. To encapsulate, it can be concluded that unhealthy lifestyle is a by-product of comfort provided by advent technology and hectic schedule which make public to consume unhygienic food. As every problem has a resolution, government can create an awareness and can save their public from sustaining unhealthy routines.
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unhealthy
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lifestyle
in recent years.
However
, it may have various reasons
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but
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technology
development and busy schedules can
be considered
as the major
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causes
. Since this requires
further
elaboration, this essay will shed light in detail on both these reasons leading to the resolution in impending paragraphs.

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begin
with,
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people
are being
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unhealthy
is a result of numerous reasons.
First
and foremost, the advancement in
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technology
is
however
providing the comfort to the
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people
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but
indirectly
, propelling them towards
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unhealthy
daily
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routines
. To elaborate, ever since
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technology
came into place with alluring comfort such as video games, television, travelling conveyance and what not, have turned
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people’s
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routine
into sedentary
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lifestyle
.
Resultantly
,
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public
have
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started
avoiding physical activities in every case and have made themselves addicted to these comfortable facilities which lead them to
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unhealthy
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lifestyle
.
Furthermore
, apart from
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technology
enhancement, busy schedule of
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people
is
also
making their
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lifestyle
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unhealthy
. To substantiate, as almost everyone
is engrossed
in their mundane affairs whether in jobs or other sort of work, is not being capable of managing the lack of time and
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have to
consume
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fast
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food
on daily basis.
Thus
, the world has witnessed that unhygienic
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food
is making
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people
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worst
on their health.
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, one of my colleagues
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is possessing
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very
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unhealthy
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lifestyle
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because
of his swamped
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routine
. Since, he is doing two jobs
simultaneously
and cannot
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get
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enough
time to cook for himself, he
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has to
consume frozen
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food
all week and adopted
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unhealthy
lifestyle.

Regardless of above
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causes
, there are numerous ways by which
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people
can
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get
rid of the
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unhealthy
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lifestyle
. Most
importantly
,
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public
should
be taught
on merits and demerits of
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technology
over-reliance. Owing to this
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cause
,
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government
or society’s leading regime should adopt a system of organizing educational seminars in order to
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keep
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people
acknowledged regarding the
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causes
and suicidal outcomes of
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unhealthy
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lifestyle
.
Nevertheless
, it is
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public
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own
preference that how much they should rely on the
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technology
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but
at
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some
point it becomes necessary to educate them and save them from
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unhealthy
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lifestyle
.
For example
, as per survey conducted by WHO in Melbourne in Australia in 2018 revealed that since the authorities had
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started
lecturing
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public
in reference to pros and cons, they had been seeing
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people
smart efforts towards quitting
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unhealthy
way of living.

To encapsulate, it can
be concluded
that
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unhealthy
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lifestyle
is a by-product of comfort provided by advent
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technology
and hectic schedule which
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make
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public
to consume unhygienic
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food
. As every problem has a resolution,
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government
can create an awareness and can save their
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public
from sustaining
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unhealthy
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routines
.
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IELTS essay Now a days people have adopted an unhealthy lifestyle. Why do you think this is and how can this problem be solved?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
446 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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