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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society? k1AN
Technology is rapidly changing the fives of people around the world, creating a high demand for university graduates with a background in science. However, the number of students studying relevant subjects is well below the required level. This problem seems to be caused by outdated preconceptions, which determine young people's choices today. One of those preconceptions is that certain subjects are better suited for men. Examples of these include mathematics, computer science, technologies and other fields of knowledge, which are totally dominated by males. In recent decades, a noticeable progress has been achieved by many countries in acknowledging that men and women are equally capable in science. Despite this big step towards equality, female employees may still feel unwelcome or, in some instances, face evident discrimination in male-dominated work environments. Ass result, many women with a natural inclination to science settle on studying humanities or social science at university, depriving society of their main talent. Another reason for the lack of science students spreads even wider. In the past, scientists were paid significantly less than professionals in such prestigious areas, such as business and law. Therefore, ambitious young people tended to choose highly paid occupations, disregarding their aptitude for science. Things have changed; today jobs in science are among those with the highest remuneration, but this trend is yet to be reflected in the university application numbers. For example, in the UK, over half of all international students still choose to study for a degree in business. Consequently, economies around the world are affected by an oversupply of social science graduates and a deficit of graduates with technical skills. Not surprisingly, complaints of fresh graduates who cannot find a job are frequent. To conclude, if seems some young people still perceive studying science as a route towards a mediocre income from a job where most of one's colleagues are men. Thus, too many opt for a degree in social sciences, creating an imbalanced society where highly-educated university graduates struggle to find a skilled job.
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changing the fives of
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people
around the world, creating a high demand for
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university
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graduates
with a background in
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science
.
However
, the number of students studying relevant subjects is well below the required level. This problem seems to
be caused
by outdated preconceptions, which determine young
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people
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today
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One of those preconceptions is that certain subjects are better suited for
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men
. Examples of these include mathematics, computer
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science
, technologies and other fields of knowledge, which are
totally
dominated by males. In recent decades,
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a noticeable progress
has
been achieved
by
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many
countries in acknowledging that
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men
and women are
equally
capable in
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science
. Despite this
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big
step towards equality, female employees may
still
feel unwelcome or, in
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some
instances, face evident discrimination in male-dominated work environments. Ass result,
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many
women with a natural inclination to
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science
settle on studying humanities or social
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science
at
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university
, depriving society of their main talent.

Another reason for the lack of
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science
students spreads even wider. In the past, scientists
were paid
significantly
less than professionals in such prestigious areas, such as business and law.
Therefore
, ambitious young
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people
tended to choose
highly
paid occupations, disregarding their aptitude for
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science
. Things have
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changed
;
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today
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jobs
in
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science
are among those with
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highest
remuneration,
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but
this trend is
yet
to
be reflected
in the
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university
application numbers.
For example
, in the UK, over half of all international students
still
choose to study for a degree in business.
Consequently
, economies around the world are
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affected
by an
oversupply
of social
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science
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graduates
and a deficit of
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graduates
with technical
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skills
. Not
surprisingly
, complaints of fresh
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graduates
who cannot find a
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job
are frequent.

To conclude
, if seems
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some
young
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people
still
perceive studying
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science
as a route towards a mediocre income from a
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job
where most of one's colleagues are
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men
.
Thus
, too
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many
opt for a degree in social
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sciences
, creating an imbalanced society where
highly
-educated
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university
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graduates
struggle to find a skilled
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job
.
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IELTS essay Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. What are the reasons for this? What impact does this issue have on society?

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