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Noadays, it is not surprising that issue of the child education has attracted many heated debates due to its impact on the whole society. In this essay, I will discuss the significant causes relating to this topic, and try to suggest some possible important solution to overcome this painful problem.

Noadays, it is not surprising that issue of the child education has attracted many heated debates due to its impact on the whole society. In this essay, I will discuss the significant causes relating to this topic, and try to suggest some possible important solution to overcome this painful problem. jRDAN

Nowadays, it is not surprising that the issue of education has attracted many heated debates due to its impact on the whole society. In this essay, I will discuss the significant causes relating to this topic, and try to suggest some possible important solution to overcome this painful problem. In conclusion, although child faces the variety of the problems, such as P1 and P2, these problems are not insurmountable. In my view, it is government's responsibility to tackle these issues, and they should begin with some of the solutions proposed above.

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IELTS essay Noadays, it is not surprising that issue of the child education has attracted many heated debates due to its impact on the whole society. In this essay, I will discuss the significant causes relating to this topic, and try to suggest some possible important solution to overcome this painful problem.

Essay

American English

2 paragraphs

91 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
Include an introduction and conclusion
Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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