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Do you agree or disagree with the idea that high schools should prohibit students from using their sell phones at school?

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I disagree with this opinion. This is because I think if the school prohibits using the smartphone, some people may suffer from disadvantages because of this restriction. For example, suppose that there is a student who can study by himself effectively while listening to the music, if the school do this, this student cannot study by himself effectively and this may affect his grade. Because of this reason, I disagree with this opinion.

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IELTS essay with the idea that high schools should prohibit students from using their sell phones at school?

Essay

American English

1 paragraphs

73 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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Lexical Resource: 6.5

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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