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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. with this opinion? Kaqw
New technologies, and in particular the Internet, are undoubtedly having a major impact on the way goods and services are bought and sold. In many countries, buying products online has become a mainstream activity. Now in the UK, for example, roughly 12 percent of all retail trade is conducted online. While some maintain that the actual impact of the Internet on shopping is negligible, I would argue that it is in fact quite significant for two main reasons. The first main reason is that the development of online shopping has meant that the market for goods available to the individual has grown exponentially. It is possible to buy virtually anything from what has effectively become a world-wide retail market: exotic foods, art works, rare books, adventure holidays; the list is endless. Products that were once only available to those who lived in large cosmopolitan cities with a wide variety of shops can now be bought by those living in small towns with few local amenities. Another significant reason is that the buyer can have more control over the process. Price comparison websites make it easier to find bargains. Shopping can be done at any time of the day or night. and shoppers can browse for as long as they like without pressure from sales assistants. This means that shoppers can potentially become more astute and knowledgeable about the products. they are buying. Because of the greater competition involved in trading within a large market, sellers may have to improve the quality of their products. In short, experience suggests that online shopping has shifted the balance of power in favour of the consumer. Consumers not only have wider access to goods but also have greater access to information and more control over how they shop
New technologies, and
in particular
the Internet, are
undoubtedly
having a major impact on the way
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goods
and services are
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bought
and sold. In
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many
countries, buying products
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online
has become a mainstream activity.
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Now
in the UK,
for example
, roughly 12 percent of all retail trade
is conducted
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online
. While
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some
maintain that the actual impact of the Internet on
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shopping
is negligible, I would argue that it is in fact quite significant for two main reasons.

The
first
main reason is that the development of
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
has meant that the market for
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goods
available to the individual has grown
exponentially
. It is possible to
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buy
virtually
anything from what has
effectively
become a world-wide retail market: exotic foods, art works, rare books, adventure holidays; the list is endless. Products that were once
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only
available to those who
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lived
in large cosmopolitan cities with a wide variety of shops can
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now
be
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bought
by those living in
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small
towns with few local amenities.

Another significant reason is that the buyer can have more control over the process. Price comparison websites
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make
it easier to find bargains.
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Shopping
can
be done
at any time of the day or night.
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and
shoppers can browse for as long as they like without pressure from sales assistants. This means that shoppers can
potentially
become more astute and knowledgeable about the products.
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they
are buying.
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Because
of the greater competition involved in trading within a large market, sellers may
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have to
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improve
the quality of their products.

In short, experience suggests that
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online
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shopping
has shifted the balance of power in
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favour
of the consumer. Consumers not
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only
have wider access to
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goods
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but
also
have greater access to information and more control over how they
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shop

IELTS essay New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. with this opinion?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
5.0
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