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n order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

n order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution? bRrl
Following industrialization, the car has become one of the most commonly owned items. With cars we can travel miles within minutes, it made our life so much easier. However, all the things have two sides, cars bring us convenience but it also creates problems for us. Almost every major city on earth is suffering from the heavy amount of traffics on roads which often cause congestion. It wastes the time of people, causes pollution due to the harmful gas eliminated by cars, also makes people feel frustrated. If the government decides to impose a heavy tax on private car owners, some people will probably get rid of the excessive cars. When people make the decision to purchase a car, they will also take the cost of heavy taxes into considerations, and may, in the end, postpone their plan of having a car. The policy can restrict the growing demand for cars. However, since the tax applies to all private cars. Thus, the tax will increase the financial burden for car owners. There are no discriminations between the cars in major cities and the cars in the rural and remote areas. This means it may not restrict the amount of car flow in the central business district in the city, where the traffic problem is more severe. Some of the people who are not in a good financial position, but must have a car to travel to work will suffer. If they cannot afford the tax, they will dispose of their cars and lose their jobs. In summary, I reckon the government should take all these factors into consideration before start taxing private car owners. The government should come out with a better solution that pinpoints the traffic jam, but not private cars in general.
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bring us convenience
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cause congestion. It wastes the time of
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, causes pollution due to the harmful gas eliminated by
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cars
,
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makes
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people
feel frustrated. If the
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government
decides to impose a heavy
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tax
on
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private
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owners,
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rid of the excessive
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into considerations, and may, in the
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, postpone their plan of having a
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. The policy can restrict the growing demand for cars.

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private
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.
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, the
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tax
will increase the financial burden for
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car
owners. There are no discriminations between the
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cars
in major cities and the
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cars
in the rural and remote areas. This means it may not restrict the amount of
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car
flow in the central business district in the city, where the traffic problem is more severe.
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who are not in a
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have a
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to travel to work will suffer. If they cannot afford the
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, they will dispose of their
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cars
and lose their jobs.

In summary, I reckon the
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should take all these factors into consideration
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out with a better solution that pinpoints the traffic jam,
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IELTS essay n order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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