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Advantages and disadvantages of modernization

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Nowadays, we are witnesses of the modernization of ancient cities. It is becoming in order to transform the old culture into the reality. A great number of technologies, devices and of course the Internet rooted in our word and people all over the world use it. We cannot imagine our days without gadgets, different services such as cafes, malls, supermarkets. So, I believe this is main point of the cultural mixture. On the one hand, the life in our planet is not static thing, so it is a natural process of appearance of new architectural styles and buildings. The tempo of life has dramatically changed. Today it is necessary have skyscrapers or blocks of houses, because it is a perfect decision of saving place, also we need wide roads and more parking places, as people are getting used to drive their own car. On the other hand, while people are trying to create something new or build typical modern building, the face and heart of the city can be lost. The affluence of illumination, bright advertising and posters usually spoil the atmosphere. It is becoming impossible immerse yourself into the historical surroundings. To my mind, our government should take care of the old centers of cities because it vibrant places with amazing views that will be a magnet for tourists. At the same time it will be perfect if they continue maintain of developing modern districts with contemporary infrastructures.
Nowadays, we are witnesses of the modernization of ancient cities. It is becoming in order to transform the
old
culture into the reality. A great number of technologies, devices and
of course
the Internet rooted in our word and
people
all over the world
use
it. We cannot imagine our days without gadgets,
different
services such as
cafes
, malls, supermarkets.
So
, I believe this is main point of the cultural mixture.

On the one hand, the life in our planet is not static thing,
so
it is a natural process of appearance of new architectural styles and buildings. The tempo of life has
dramatically
changed
.
Today
it is necessary have skyscrapers or blocks of
houses
,
because
it is a perfect decision of saving place,
also
we need wide roads and more parking places, as
people
are getting
used
to drive their
own
car.

On the other hand
, while
people
are trying to create something new or build typical modern building, the face and heart of the city can
be lost
. The affluence of illumination, bright advertising and posters
usually
spoil the atmosphere. It is becoming impossible immerse yourself into the historical surroundings.

To my mind, our
government
should take care of the
old
centers of cities
because
it
vibrant places with amazing views that will be a magnet for tourists. At the same time it will be perfect if they
continue maintain
of developing modern districts with contemporary infrastructures.
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IELTS essay Advantages and disadvantages of modernization

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