Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

My future profession. I want to be a journalist.

My future profession. I want to be a journalist. PLop2
There are a lot of interesting and creative jobs. Ever since I was young, I've always wanted to be a journalist because I like journal and reading books. My favourite books are Monster High and Harry Potter. Some puoils follow advice of their parents friends or even teachers. Other can't make a decision just to go to work. Personally I made my choice long ago. I enjoy reading books about writers, poets at my local library. I like to learn about them life and work. I think my main job is to find different news for example; BBC News, Ted talks, Fashion week, car models, cities life and more others. I know journalists will definitely find new news. It is impossible to say that they will not be found because there will be new messages on the phones, in newspapers, on social networks. I have to be extremely responsible to be able to talk on TV without stopping. I must improve my communication skills. In this career I should have critical to make decisions under pressure and I also like english, russian, korean languages. I want to create the best education centre in my city in the future. I am sure my dream will come true. But first of all, I should complete a Uzbekistan state World languages university degree at an accredited university of lessons. In my conclusion of course I will be the best journalist in the future and open education centre, and I will fulfill all my other dreams and goals.
There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
interesting and creative jobs. Ever since I was young, I've always wanted to be a journalist
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I like journal and reading books. My
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
books are Monster High and Harry Potter.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
Possible spelling mistake found.
puoils
follow advice of their parents friends or even teachers. Other can't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a decision
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
to go to work.
Personally
I made my choice long ago. I enjoy reading books about writers, poets at my local library. I like to learn about them life and work.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
my main job is to find
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
for example
; BBC
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
News
, Ted talks, Fashion week, car models, cities life and more others.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
know journalists will definitely find
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
. It is impossible to say that they will not
be found
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there will be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
messages on the phones, in newspapers, on social networks. I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
be
extremely
responsible to be able to talk on TV without stopping. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
my communication
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. In this career I should have critical to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
decisions under pressure and I
also
like
Possible spelling mistake found.
english
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
russian
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
korean
languages. I want to create the best education
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
in my city in the future. I am sure my dream will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
true.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
first of all
, I should complete
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
Uzbekistan state World
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "languages'" or "language's"?
languages
university degree at an accredited university of lessons. In my conclusion
of course
I will be the best journalist in the future and open education
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
, and I will fulfill all my other dreams and goals.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay My future profession. I want to be a journalist.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
254 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5band
    what do you feel most inspired about JK Rowling
    JK Rowling inspired me to with passion. I'm impressed because she's a strong woman; she overcame a difficult, depressive period of her life so that she is now a successful person. And in 2004, Forbes named Rowling as the first person to become a U. S. -dollar billionaire by writing books. She is the...
  • 5band
    Introduce yourself briefly
    My name is Phó Hoàng Ngọc Nhi. I was born in Ho Chi Minh City. Being born in a modern, friendly, enthusiastic city, so I consider myself a typical city girl who has similar personality traits to this beautiful city. Beside that, I can work well under pressure, and I have never missed a deadline. ...
  • 6.5band
    Reoffemd is common. describe its reasons and solitiosn.
    The term re-offend refers to the reiterating of a crime after experiencing the negative consequences of it earlier. This practice is becoming a major issue of concern and there could be many reasons underlying which will be discussed thoroughly along with the effective solutions to mitigate this phe...
  • 6band
    Reoffend causes and solutions.
    The term re-offend refers to the reiterating of a crime after experiencing the negative consequences of it earlier. This practice is becoming a major issue of concern and there could be many reasons underlying which will be discussed thoroughly along with the effective solutions to mitigate this phe...
  • 5band
    Nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time being active or creative.
    Television has evolved. Today, there are number of informative channels are available. People are updated with live 24 hours news channels. For example, a number of channels like BBC news, National geographic and Discovery provided knowledge and vocabulary to students. In addition, television bring...
  • 6.5band
    some people believe that for more secure and peaceful life we should restore death penalty.
    It is argued that the government should restore capital punishment in order to live in a safe environment and to reduce the accelerating crime rate. I completely agree with the opinion that without the death penalty our society will become an unsafe place for people's life. In the first place, the ...