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Museum in the city I live

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The purpose of this report is to shed light on the gallery, which is located in our school and provide some information on class visiting. The museum I have recently attended the gallery established by my head of school, and here is my observation. To begin with, the museum is equipped with many scientific showpieces, such as books, video materials and exponents, which are excellent helpers for students studying here. Additionally, the exhibition is divided into many departments such as historical, mathematical, or humanitarian; thus, many diverse students can find helpful information. For example, if attenders want to find a textbook about a specific topic, they need to go to the exhibition's required part, and a librarian find it. On the other hand, if a student wants to watch something instead of reading, it is envisaged in the other part of the museum. Class visiting Since the gallery has several studying rooms, it is feasible to make excursions for students. Besides, it is also stipulated auditories with digitals materials and various toys for small children to interact and study. That is why I am truly convinced that this museum can be useful for all aged students because each of them may find something needed. To conclude my words, I want to say had this gallery been established before, it would have made it easier for me to study in school.
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in our school and provide
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some
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The museum

I have recently attended the
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gallery
established by my head of school, and here is my observation. To
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begin
with, the museum
is equipped
with
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many
scientific showpieces, such as books, video materials and exponents, which are excellent helpers for
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students
studying here.
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, the exhibition
is divided
into
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many
departments such as historical, mathematical, or humanitarian;
thus
,
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many
diverse
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students
can
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find
helpful information.
For example
, if attenders want to
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find
a textbook about a specific topic, they need to go to the exhibition's required part, and a librarian
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find
it.
On the other hand
, if a
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student
wants to
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watch
something
instead
of reading, it
is envisaged
in the other part of the museum.

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Class
visiting

Since the
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gallery
has several studying rooms, it is feasible to
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make
excursions for
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students
.
Besides
, it is
also
stipulated
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auditories
with
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digitals
materials and various toys for
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small
children to interact and study.
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why I am
truly
convinced that this museum can be useful for all aged
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students
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because
each of them may
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find
something needed.
To conclude
my words, I want to say had this
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gallery
been established
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before
, it would have made it easier for me to study in school.
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IELTS essay Museum in the city I live

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
230 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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