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Most young people without a partner would prefer to have a boyfriend or girlfriend. Yet being in a relationship when you are young is not always a good idea. Do you agree or disagree?

Most young people without a partner would prefer to have a boyfriend or girlfriend. Yet being in a relationship when you are young is not always a good idea. pLrW0
Everybody need somebody to remind us that we're not alone, somebody to wake up to when everyone's gone. People nowadays are more under pressure to get into a relationship & settle their love life while forgetting their actual purpose, their dreams. People are intimidated & anxious for their future; either if they'll meet their partner or not. I believe this is the time to assemble our life & to accomplish our dreams without the fear of future. Normally, taking the responsibility of a person, committing to fulfil their needs & interests is not the right choice at a young age. It consumes a lot of time to look after a person or his/her life. We need to use our time wisely and should use it effectively which can contribute to a better future. Although, there are young people who desire to live alone and to focus on their lives, while many believe to be in a relationship without the acknowledgment of the problems & consequences. Financial problems are on the first place to be acknowledged. Being in a relationship, people are so accustomed to impress their mates & for this purpose, perhaps they spend a lot of money for them while neglecting the fact that they can use this money for really better things. Some teenagers become so spendthrift that at last, the put themselves in a situation of emotional distress, depression & exhaustion. On the second place people can lose opportunities in life & can blindly listen to what their partner have to say, which is also a major problem. For example, A boy or girl may lose opportunity to get admission in the best college they deserve which is in different city only to stay close to their partner. For instance a boy/girl can simply choose an education stream which their partner had chosen on contrary to them. Getting a partner who understands us, supports us and can always be there for us is blessing in life but at a descent age. Wasting time for being in relationship can eventually become a curse while believing in ourselves and establishing the life of our dreams can be really judicious. The act to choose the path is up to us.
Everybody need somebody to remind us that we're not alone, somebody to wake up to when everyone's gone.
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People
nowadays are more under pressure to
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get
into a
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relationship
& settle their
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love
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life
while forgetting their actual purpose, their dreams.
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People
are intimidated
& anxious for their future; either if they'll
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meet
their
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partner
or not. I believe this is the
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time
to assemble our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
& to accomplish our dreams without the fear of future.

Normally
, taking the responsibility of a person, committing to fulfil their needs & interests is not the right choice at a young age. It consumes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
to look after a person or his/her
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life
. We need to
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use
our
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time
wisely
and should
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use
it
effectively
which can contribute to a better future. Although, there are young
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people
who desire to
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live
alone and to focus on their
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lives
, while
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many
believe to be in a
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relationship
without the acknowledgment of the problems & consequences.

Financial problems are on the
first
place to
be acknowledged
. Being in a
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relationship
,
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people
are
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so
accustomed to impress their mates & for this purpose, perhaps they spend
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a lot of
money for them while neglecting the fact that they can
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use
this money for
The extreme adjective for good is "wonderful", "fantastic", "superb", "perfect", or "excellent".
really better
things.
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Some
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teenagers
become
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so
spendthrift that at last, the put themselves in a situation of emotional distress, depression & exhaustion.

On the second place
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people
can lose opportunities in
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life
& can
blindly
listen to what their
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partner
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have to
say, which is
also
a major problem.
For example
, A boy or girl may lose opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
admission in the best college they deserve which is in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
city
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to stay close to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
partner
.
For instance
a boy/girl can
simply
choose an education stream which their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
partner
had chosen on contrary to them.

Getting a
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partner
who understands us, supports us and can always be there for us is blessing in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
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but
at a descent age.

Wasting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
for being in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
relationship
can
eventually
become a curse while believing in ourselves and establishing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
of our dreams can be
really
judicious. The act to choose the path is up to us.
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IELTS essay Most young people without a partner would prefer to have a boyfriend or girlfriend. Yet being in a relationship when you are young is not always a good idea.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
370 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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