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Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

A section of society asserts that homeless people must be given financial help. In my opinion, I agree with this part as a myopic solution because people without any shelter of their own should be encouraged for education or their skills should be enhanced to help them settle in long term. To begin with, people who don't have any place to stay are very unfortunate and it is the duty of the community to extend their helping hand to make them available what they are deprived of. Any kind of financial help is always appreciated hence the near-term needs are fulfilled. Clothes, food, and shelter are the basic necessities of any human being for survival. For example, many charitable organizations raise money to help such people. Nevertheless, from an enlightened standpoint, government and charitable organizations should also focus more on the strategic solution to this problem. They need to be provided with education and followed by other professional skills which will eventually make them self sufficient and not dependent on any kind of donations. For example, governments should open up training centers that would emphasize building the relevant skills which the homeless people can learn. These training facilities should provide shelter, food, and relevant training which will help these people overcome the fear and be confident that they can earn and will be respected in society. Therefore, the government's planning and execution of different schemes can help anybody to again earn for themselves and also gain respect. In conclusion, to deal with this problem of the society where some people have no access to the house, creating a proper plan and right execution of such plans can reduce or remove the problem entirely from the society.
A section of
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asserts that homeless
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must
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. In my opinion, I
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agree
with this part as a myopic solution
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because
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people
without any shelter of their
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own
should
be encouraged
for education or their
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skills
should
be enhanced
to
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help
them settle in long term.

To
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begin
with,
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people
who don't have any place to stay are
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unfortunate and
it is the duty of the community to extend their helping hand to
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make
them available what they
are deprived
of. Any kind of financial
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help
is always appreciated
hence
the near-term needs
are fulfilled
. Clothes, food, and shelter are the
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basic necessities
of any human being for survival.
For example
,
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many
charitable organizations raise money to
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help
such
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people
.

Nevertheless
, from an enlightened standpoint,
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government
and charitable organizations should
also
focus more on the strategic solution to this problem. They need to
be provided
with education and followed by other professional
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skills
which will
eventually
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make
them
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self sufficient
and not dependent on any kind of donations.
For example
,
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governments
should open up training centers that would emphasize building the relevant
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skills
which the homeless
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people
can learn. These training facilities should provide shelter, food, and relevant training which will
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help
these
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people
overcome the fear and be confident that they can earn and will
be respected
in
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society
.
Therefore
, the
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government
's planning and execution of
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different
schemes can
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help
anybody to again earn for themselves and
also
gain respect.

In conclusion
, to deal with this problem of the
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society
where
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some
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people
have no access to the
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house
, creating a proper plan and right execution of such plans can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
or remove the problem
entirely
from the
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society
.
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IELTS essay Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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