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Most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, so museums are not needed anymore.

Most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, so museums are not needed anymore. 6MAK
Well, I don't agree with it. On one side it is right that we can found all Information about everything and with help modern technology we can do visual tour as if we are at there. But in the museums we can see it with all their charm. Museums also save it in good quality. So think museums are still relevant. However, efforts must be made for integrity of museums, art galleries and they should also refurbished by the country to boost the economy and beneficial for people. To conclude, a nation’s historical and cultural treasures abound in museums. Therefore, there must be maintained and it cannot be replaced by visiting the museum in person.
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found
all Information about everything and with
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help
modern technology we can do visual tour as if we are at there.
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in the
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museums
we can
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see
it with all their charm.
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Museums
also
save it in
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good
quality.
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So
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think
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museums
are
still
relevant.
However
, efforts
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must
be made
for integrity of
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museums
, art
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galleries and
they should
also
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refurbished
by the country to boost the economy and beneficial for
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people
.

To conclude
, a nation’s historical and cultural treasures abound in
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museums
.
Therefore
, there
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must
be maintained
and it cannot
be replaced
by visiting the
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museum
in person.

IELTS essay Most information about culture and history can be found on the internet, so museums are not needed anymore.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
115 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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