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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree?

Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree? m1Wy1
It is argued that corporations should be compelled to give a certain proportion of their executive-level roles to females given that that over half of the workforce is female in the West. It is agreed that businesses should be obliged to assign a significant percentage of top-level posts to women. In this essay, I will discuss why women should be paid an equal amount of money for doing the same job as a man, and secondly, the fact that girls are currently outperforming boys on many university courses. Despite years of so-called ‘equal rights’ for women in the workplace they continue to be underpaid. Many women who do exactly the same job as their male colleagues earn less money and this is unfair. For example, a recent survey of accountancy and legal firms in the United Kingdom found that women earn on average 17% less than men with identical roles. However, this may be due to women taking maternity leave and falling behind their male counterparts. This unfairness is compounded by the fact that females are currently getting higher grades in most university courses. Even previously male-dominated fields, such as law and medicine, now see women in the ascendency and they should, therefore, be rewarded with top roles. For example, females recently outperformed males for the first time in law in U. K. universities. Despite this, employers should bear in mind that roles should be handed out on merit, not gender alone. In conclusion, women do deserve an equal share of the good jobs available, namely because they are capable of doing an equally good job as men and are achieving higher academic standards than men at university. It is recommended that companies heed the advice in this essay and make their hiring practices fairer.
It
is argued
that corporations should
be compelled
to give a certain proportion of their executive-level
roles
to
females
given
that that over half of the workforce is
female
in the West. It is
agreed
that businesses should
be obliged
to assign a significant percentage of top-level posts to
women
. In this essay, I will discuss why
women
should
be paid
an equal amount of money for doing the same
job
as a
man
, and
secondly
, the fact that girls are
currently
outperforming boys on
many
university
courses.

Despite years of
so
-called ‘equal rights’ for
women
in the workplace they continue to be underpaid.
Many
women
who do exactly the same
job
as their male colleagues earn less money and this is unfair.
For example
, a recent survey of accountancy and legal firms in the United Kingdom found that
women
earn on average 17% less than
men
with identical
roles
.
However
, this may be due to
women
taking maternity
leave
and falling behind their male counterparts.

This unfairness
is compounded
by the fact that
females
are
currently
getting higher grades in most
university
courses. Even previously male-dominated fields, such as law and medicine,
now
see
women
in the
ascendency and
they should,
therefore
,
be rewarded
with top
roles
.
For example
,
females
recently outperformed males for the
first
time in law in U. K.
universities
. Despite this, employers should bear in mind that
roles
should
be handed
out on merit, not gender alone.

In conclusion
,
women
do deserve an equal share of the
good
jobs
available,
namely
because
they are capable of doing an
equally
good
job
as
men
and are achieving higher academic standards than
men
at
university
. It
is recommended
that
companies
heed the advice in this essay and
make
their hiring practices fairer.
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IELTS essay Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
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