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More people than ever before than travelling to other countries now. Why is this case? Is this positive development or negative development?

More people than ever before than travelling to other countries now. Why is this case? Is this positive development or negative development? LNK3
It is an irrefutable fact that travelling abroad is becoming more and more popular than ever before. Personally, this phenomenon seems to me that both have negative and positive effects. In this essay, I will discuss several reasons of this trend and explain my views of point. To begin with, there are two contributing factors behind this populatiry. The first and foremost purpose for this is many people want to learn about different culture from other countries around the world. This makes them enrich their knowledge and helps them have a wide range of understanding about the world. Sencondly, going abroad is a chance for them to visit relatives. For example, my aunt lives in California, America so all of my family pay a visit to see her every 2 years, which is also a big opportunity for us to discover such a big country. According to me, cross-border trips bring both positive and negative effects on society. On terms of the merits, citizens in the country may benefit a lot. Coming to a country, the demand for accommodation, food, entertaining activities increase. In order to meet that demand, local people provide. As a result, they earn a great amount of money and so doed the government. However, environment may be badly affected in the long run. For example, the more people travel abroad, the more transport vehicles are used. An airplane is used common for going to other country but it consumes tons of gallons of fuel and then emit exhaust fumes into the atmosphere, which damage strongly to ecosystem. In conclusion, the populatiry of travelling abroad due to the expansion of knowledge and personal purpose. In my opinion, the development has positive effects in the short run but may do more harm than good in the long run, according to the aforementioned example above.
It is an irrefutable fact that travelling
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abroad
is becoming more and more popular than ever
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before
.
Personally
, this phenomenon seems to me that both have
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negative
and
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positive
effects. In this essay, I will discuss several reasons of this trend and
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explain
my views of point.

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begin
with, there are two contributing factors behind this
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populatiry
. The
first
and foremost purpose for this is
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many
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people
want to learn about
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different
culture from other
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countries
around the world. This
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makes
them enrich their knowledge and
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helps
them have a wide range of understanding about the world.
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Sencondly
, going
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abroad
is a chance for them to visit relatives.
For example
, my aunt
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lives
in California, America
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so
all of my family pay a visit to
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see
her every 2 years, which is
also
a
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big
opportunity for us to discover such a
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big
country.

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According to me
, cross-border trips bring both
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positive
and
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negative
effects on society. On terms of the merits, citizens in the
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country
may benefit a lot. Coming to a
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country
, the demand for accommodation, food, entertaining activities increase. In order to
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meet
that demand, local
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people
provide.
As a result
, they earn a great amount of money and
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so
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doed
the
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government
.
However
, environment may be
badly
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affected
in the long run.
For example
, the more
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people
travel
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abroad
, the more transport vehicles are
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used
. An airplane is
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used
common for going to other
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country
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but
it consumes tons of gallons of fuel and then emit exhaust fumes into the atmosphere, which damage
strongly
to ecosystem.

In conclusion
, the
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populatiry
of travelling
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abroad
due to the expansion of knowledge and personal purpose. In my opinion, the development has
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positive
effects in the short run
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but
may do more harm than
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good
in the long run, according to the aforementioned example above.
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IELTS essay More people than ever before than travelling to other countries now. Why is this case? Is this positive development or negative development?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
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