Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions? kYx7n
Most of the people are consuming sugar-based drinks despite health professionals are warning the public about the impacts on health due to this habit. The major reasons for the raise in sugar based drinks consumption are advertisement and increasing habit of consuming junk foods. Advertisement plays a vital role in attracting children and even adults towards any products. Most of the advertisement what we see on different Medias are unethical and unrealistic. For instance, there are advertisements which show sugar based rinks increases energy but in real scenario it won’t boost up energy and instead it causes rise in sugar level which in turn causes health issues such as diabetes and obesity. Another major cause of increased sugar based drink is attraction towards junk foods. Young people are addicted to junk foods now to save time on cooking and due to the added flavors on it. Most of them are buying sugar based drinks along with it. The effective solution for this problem is to increase the awareness among the public and to impose strict regulations for producing such drinks. Government should take actions to create awareness among people about the long term health issues of sugar based product consumption by conducting campaign or through social media. It is also very important to impose strict laws for those companies who use sugar level in drinks beyond the guided sugar level
Most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are consuming sugar-based
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drinks
despite
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
professionals are warning the public about the impacts on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
due to this habit.

The major reasons for the raise in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
based
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drinks
consumption are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
and increasing habit of consuming junk foods.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Advertisement
plays a vital role in attracting children and even adults towards any products. Most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
what we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
Medias are unethical and unrealistic.
For instance
, there are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
based rinks increases energy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
in real scenario it won’t boost up energy and
instead
it causes rise in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
level which in turn causes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
issues such as diabetes and obesity. Another major cause of increased
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
based
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drink
is attraction towards junk foods. Young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are addicted
to junk foods
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
to save time on cooking and due to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
flavors on it. Most of them are buying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
based
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drinks
along with it.

The effective solution for this problem is to increase the awareness among the public and to impose strict regulations for producing such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drinks
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should take actions to create awareness among
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
about the long term
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
issues of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
based product consumption by conducting campaign or through social media. It is
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to impose strict laws for those
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
level in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drinks
beyond the guided
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sugar
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
level
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
229 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts