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More and more people are using the Internet to do their tasks rather than doing in person. (e.g. banking, shopping, hotel booking etc. ). Do the advantage of this trend outweigh the disadvantage

More and more people are using the Internet to do their tasks rather than doing in person. (e. g. banking, shopping, hotel booking etc. ). Do the advantage of this trend outweigh the disadvantage PpdK
In this concurrent world, it is undoubtedly true that, the rise and adaption of technology is increasing significantly. The usage of internet is made the life of public easier, quicker and comfortable. I would argue that these are outweighed by the advantages. To commence with, there are myriad of benefits, firstly, online shopping enables consumers to get a service or a product from home. They no need to travel a long distance or wait in a long queue. It is save lots of time. Secondly, online banking, ticket booking system, payment and online-sub scription facilitate mass people to avoid traffic congestion. It is help to maintain a green environment. Thirdly, online shopping run the business 24×7 hours and without the need for any extra staff. For example, according to the survey of "Times of India" 70% of people like to prefer not only online shopping but also using in hotel booking and banking. That is why co2 pollution also less because people do not go outdoor for shopping so no more traffic problem it is very benifitial to environment. On the other hand, there are many drawbacks of online shopping. First formost, of people are using the all time on internet for shopping so they get wrong information and get defective piece sometimes. Last but not least, online banking identity theft and digital scams are more common. For exemplify, according to "BBC" news in the world their are so many complain for cheat and hacking their bank details. So government should be strong app security provided to people. Moreover, careless use of a credit card and personal information is often invite hackers to harm someone. To conclude, it is true that, online shopping, banking and hotel booking is very useful and in the morden world most of humans prefer this. But, sometimes. e it is risk factor involved in transaction.
In this concurrent world, it is
undoubtedly
true that, the rise and adaption of technology is increasing
significantly
. The usage of internet
is made
the life of public easier, quicker and comfortable. I would argue that these
are outweighed
by the advantages. To commence with, there are myriad of benefits,
firstly
,
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online
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shopping
enables consumers to
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get
a service or a product from home. They no need to travel a long distance or wait in a long queue. It is
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save
lots of time.
Secondly
,
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online
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banking
, ticket booking system, payment and
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online-sub scription
facilitate mass
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people
to avoid traffic congestion. It is
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help
to maintain a green environment.
Thirdly
,
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online
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shopping
run the business 24×7 hours and without the need for any extra staff.
For example
, according to the survey of
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Times of India
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70% of
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people
like to prefer not
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only
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online
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shopping
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but
also
using in hotel booking and
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banking
.
That is
why co2 pollution
also
less
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because
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people
do not go outdoor for
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shopping
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so
no more traffic problem it is
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very
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benifitial
to environment.
On the other hand
, there are
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drawbacks of
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online
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shopping
.
First
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formost
, of
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people
are using the
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all time
on internet for
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shopping
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so
they
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get
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wrong
information and
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get
defective piece
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sometimes
. Last
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but
not least,
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online
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banking
identity theft and digital scams are more common. For exemplify, according to
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BBC
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news in the world
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their
are
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so
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complain for
cheat and hacking their bank
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details
.
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government
should be strong app security provided to
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people
.
Moreover
, careless
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use
of a credit card and personal information is
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often
invite hackers to harm someone.
To conclude
, it is true that,
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online
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shopping
,
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banking
and hotel booking is
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very
useful and in the
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morden
world
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most of humans
prefer this.
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sometimes
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IELTS essay More and more people are using the Internet to do their tasks rather than doing in person. (e. g. banking, shopping, hotel booking etc. ). Do the advantage of this trend outweigh the disadvantage

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