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More and more people are becoming overweigh.some people think that increasing the price of the food will solve this issues.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

More and more people are becoming overweigh. some people think that increasing the price of the food will solve this issues. q10Vd
People nowadays are getting obese due to numerous reasons. Therefore, it is being opined by fewer masses rising the cost of fast food would solve this problem. I entirely disagree with the given statement because inclining price of food is not ideal way to tackle this issue because various other solution can be applied to reduce weight of people which I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphed. To commence with, there are number of ways help to solve this problem. The most preponderant is expanding awareness amongst people. The reason for this is that some masses do not have idea about the detrimental effect of consuming an amount of junk food. They prefer ready- made food owing to the fact of unique taste. However, providing knowledge regarding the healthy food can assist to make people healthy and decline the weight of people. Regardless of this, increasing fast food outlets should be banned. This is because these days people can buy not only these food items on cheaper price, but also from every nook and corner of the areas. Hence, if food shops are situated far away from residential places, it can decline the tendency of people to purchase junk food. Take Canada an example, last year particular rule related to open food outlets was implemented by government due to this majority of have left to eat these foods. To conclude, after giving viewpoints it is crystal clear that escalating food price is not effective solution, but people can be aware to stop eating fast food besides banning food shops.
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People
nowadays are getting obese due to numerous reasons.
Therefore
, it is
being opined
by fewer masses rising the cost of
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fast
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food
would solve this problem. I
entirely
disagree with the
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given
statement
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because
inclining price of
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food
is not
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ideal
way to tackle this issue
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because
various other solution can
be applied
to
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reduce
weight of
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people
which I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphed.

To commence with, there are number of ways
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help
to solve this problem. The most preponderant is expanding awareness amongst
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people
.
The reason for this is
that
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some
masses do not have
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idea
about the detrimental effect of consuming an amount of junk
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food
. They prefer ready- made
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food
owing to the fact of unique taste.
However
, providing knowledge regarding the healthy
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food
can assist to
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make
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people
healthy and decline the weight of
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people
.

Regardless of this, increasing
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fast
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food
outlets should
be banned
. This is
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because
these days
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people
can
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buy
not
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only
these
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food
items on cheaper price,
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but
also
from every nook and corner of the areas.
Hence
, if
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food
shops
are situated
far away from residential places, it can decline the tendency of
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people
to
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purchase
junk
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food
. Take Canada an example, last year particular
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rule
related to open
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food
outlets
was implemented
by
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government
due to this majority of have
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left
to eat these foods.

To conclude
, after giving viewpoints it is crystal
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clear
that escalating
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food
price is not effective solution,
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but
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people
can be aware to
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stop
eating
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fast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
besides
banning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
shops.
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IELTS essay More and more people are becoming overweigh. some people think that increasing the price of the food will solve this issues.

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