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money should be spent on constructing new railways line for very fast trains or improving existing public transport

money should be spent on constructing new railways line for very fast trains or improving existing public transport PVAXE
In some countries, it is argued that huge amount of money must be spend on building new railways lines for fast intercity trains, while other contend to use this money for boosting public transport. This essay will discuss both sides and gives the writer's opinion. to begin with, there are several advantageous of very fast trains between cities. Firstly, the major usage of cars will decrease, due to the fact that they do not have to drive long hours to commute from one city to another and, as a result pollution reduces. Secondly, this phenomenon could have fun aspect to travel as fast as possible all around the country. On the other hand, improving public transport has a lot of pros for every societies. First, By using public transport we greatly help the environment in terms of global warming and pollution. As good public attracts more people, poor public transport can be annoying and, as a result more people appeal to travel with their own cars. Secondly, In order to provide a safe trip, governments should spend more money on public transport. To summarize, in order to keep the environment balanced, governments should use more new buses to attract more people to travel with public transport.
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countries, it
is argued
that huge amount of money
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spend
on building new railways lines for
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fast
intercity trains, while other contend to
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use
this money for boosting
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public
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transport
. This essay will discuss both sides and gives the writer's opinion.
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with, there are several advantageous of
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very
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fast
trains between cities.
Firstly
, the major usage of cars will decrease, due to the fact that they do not
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have to
drive long hours to commute from one city to another and,
as a result
pollution
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reduces
.
Secondly
, this phenomenon could have fun aspect to travel as
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fast
as possible all around the country.
On the other hand
, improving
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public
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transport
has
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a lot of
pros for every
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societies
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First
, By using
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public
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transport
we
greatly
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help
the environment in terms of global warming and pollution. As
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good
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public
attracts more
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people
, poor
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public
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transport
can be annoying and,
as a result
more
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people
appeal to travel with their
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own
cars.
Secondly
, In order to provide a safe trip,
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governments
should spend more money on
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public
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transport
.
To summarize
, in order to
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keep
the environment balanced,
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governments
should
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use
more new buses to attract more
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people
to travel with
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public
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transport
.
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IELTS essay money should be spent on constructing new railways line for very fast trains or improving existing public transport

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
206 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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