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Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession

Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession BJM9p
Students expect to find job immediately after their graduation. However, in reality it’s tedious for them to get an employment in their chosen profession. This essay will examine the main reason behind it along with the possible solution to the problem. The main factor for the majority of students not being able to get job is lack of practical knowledge required for a given profession. The university focuses merely in theoretical knowledge rather than practical one but in real working environment it is indispensable to have practical knowledge to work. For example, the course study like culinary arts needs more practical skills than theoretical to be able to work in hospitality industry. Along with this the other reason for university graduates not getting employment in chosen profession is requirement of experience. Whenever a vacancy is announced from organization, they ask for minimum of two to three of experience in which a fresh graduates lacks. This makes complicated for recently graduates students to find work. In my opinion, the colleges and universities should update the old-fashioned teaching pattern. There must be provision of providing practical skills together with theoretical knowledge. For instance, college should provide internship program for at least six months to one year to the students of hospitality. It makes students capable to work in organization that requires experience with practical skills as they get exposure to work nationally and internationally in the real work environment. In conclusion, it is possible to get job in the chosen profession after graduation if practical skills are not ignored by university. And the teaching system should be updated according to the demand and situation.
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to find job immediately after their graduation.
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get
an employment in their chosen
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. This essay will examine the main reason behind it along with the possible solution to the problem.

The main factor for the majority of
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students
not being able to
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job is lack of
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practical
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knowledge
required for a
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profession
. The
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university
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knowledge
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in real working environment it is indispensable to have
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work
.
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, the course study like culinary arts needs more
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practical
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skills
than theoretical to be able to
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work
in hospitality industry.

Along with this the other reason for
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university
graduates not getting employment in chosen
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profession
is requirement of experience. Whenever a vacancy
is announced
from organization, they
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ask for
minimum of two to three of experience in which a fresh graduates lacks.
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universities
should update the
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old
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must
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practical
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skills
together with theoretical
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knowledge
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students
of hospitality. It
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capable to
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work
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practical
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skills
as they
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exposure to
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work
nationally
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work
environment.

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job in the chosen
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after graduation if
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practical
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by
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university
. And the teaching system should
be updated
according to the demand and situation.
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IELTS essay Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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