Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Many teenagers ahve their wn smartphones. does this situation have more advanatges or disadvantages

Many teenagers ahve their wn smartphones. does this situation have more advanatges or disadvantages dD597
Teenagers are now demanding their own smart phone. this situation which always been debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming that it is beneficial while other reject the notion. This particular trend sparked over the controversy had a major impact in recent years. This essay will discuss both pros and cons of this trend till a logical conclusion. I think that there is negative effect on children mind. Analyzing the statement and explain further, the one fact from the stem is nowadays in large number of information is available on internet some are beneficial and other are not. Some can create a negative effect on teens because they are not mature enough to understand what is good or bad. Moreover, smart phone can distribute his concentration from study. For example, my brother in law who is addicted with mobile phone he cannot focus on his study, he always play video game. Furthermore, a survey has organized by government regarding smartphone are available to teen at very early age by their parents. 60% of the total population has provide it. Not only phone can harmful for teenagers but also for the adults. According to American articles children are getting intrused in phone because of there parents. Despite, smart phone can also useful for teen in different way. To start with, a number of school are located far from village so smart phone can save the time and cost of transportation, teens can easily study at home using phone, attaining online class. Another benefit of this regard is that tuition fee were saved while using phone because a number of informative information are available on internet platforms like Google and Chrome. To conclude, the information mentioned above about teens have his own which has a number of drawbacks, to some extend it is beneficial for teenagers.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Teenagers
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
demanding their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
this
situation which
The adverb 'always' usually goes after the verb 'been'.
always been
debatable has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
become more controversial with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
claiming that it is beneficial while other reject the notion. This particular trend sparked over the controversy had a major impact in recent years. This essay will discuss both pros and cons of this trend till a logical conclusion. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that there is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect on children mind.

Analyzing the statement and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
further
, the one fact from the stem is nowadays in large
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of information is available on internet
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
are beneficial and other are not.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
can create a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effect on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teens
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are not mature
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to understand what is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
.
Moreover
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
can distribute his concentration from study.
For example
, my
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
brother in law
who
is addicted
with mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
he cannot focus on his study, he always
The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "plays", "played".
play
video game.
Furthermore
, a survey has organized by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
regarding smartphone are available to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teen
at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
early age by their parents. 60% of the total population has
Use past participle here: "provided".
provide
it. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
can harmful for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
for the adults. According to American articles children are getting
Possible spelling mistake found.
intrused
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of
Did you mean "their"?
there
parents.

Despite,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
can
also
useful for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teen
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
way. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of school
are located
far from village
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
can save the time and cost of transportation,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teens
can
easily
study at home using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
, attaining online
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. Another benefit of this regard is that tuition fee
were saved
while using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of informative information are available on internet platforms like Google and Chrome.
To conclude
, the information mentioned above about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teens
have his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
which has a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of drawbacks, to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Did you mean the noun "extent"?
extend
it is beneficial for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Many teenagers ahve their wn smartphones. does this situation have more advanatges or disadvantages

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
307 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Many teenagers ahve their wn smartphones. does this situation have more advanatges or disadvantages