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Many products are advertised through the Internet these days. Why? Will it continue after 30 years?

There are two main reasons why products are advertised on the Internet. Firstly, it is obvious nowadays most people have a connection with the internet, social media, etc. Therefore, the company considers that if they take a photo of their products, and then posted on social media like Instagram, Facebook they will get great attention from the customer. Secondly, it is a known fact the major percent of the customer is young people, who surfing the internet approximately three or four hours. In addition, this reason provides the company with significant degree export of product As far as l considering day by day every company, the supermarket has a tendency to be managed over the internet. In addition, nowadays approximately 90 percent of young people to be addicted to the internet. Average, they spend 5 or 6 hours on the Internet, especially on social media. Furthermore, many companies create the internet site for selling their products, harvest, so on like "Amazon, " "Ali Express". As a result, it's easy to get great attention from the customer and distribute their product over the world In conclusion, the Internet is one of the best choices for selling products around the world. If more people have a tendency for buying the products like electronic devices, clothes, accessory, then the inclination will be growing and after 25-30 years more people have access to buying the product on the internet
There are two main reasons why
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products
are advertised
on the Internet.
Firstly
, it is obvious nowadays most
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people
have a connection with the internet, social media, etc.
Therefore
, the
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company
considers that if they take a photo of their
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products
, and then posted on social media like Instagram, Facebook they will
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get
great attention from the customer.
Secondly
, it is a known fact the major percent of the customer is young
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people
, who surfing the internet approximately three or four hours.
In addition
, this reason provides the
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company
with significant degree export of
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product


As far as l considering day by day every
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company
, the supermarket has a tendency to
be managed
over the internet.
In addition
, nowadays approximately 90 percent of young
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people
to
be addicted
to the internet. Average, they spend 5 or 6 hours on the Internet,
especially
on social media.
Furthermore
,
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companies
create the internet site for selling their
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products
, harvest,
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on like
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"
Amazon,
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"
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"
Ali Express
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"
.
As a result
, it's easy to
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get
great attention from the customer and distribute their
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product
over the
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world


In conclusion
, the Internet is one of the best choices for selling
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products
around the world. If more
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people
have a tendency for buying the
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products
like electronic devices, clothes, accessory, then the inclination will be growing and after 25-30 years more
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people
have access to buying the
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product
on the
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internet
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IELTS essay Many products are advertised through the Internet these days. Why? Will it continue after 30 years?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
234 words
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