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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Other believes that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits. Discuss both the view and give opinion.

In this concurrent era, arranging athletic event are ubiquitous across the globe. Some believe that it creates many dilemmas. While, I side with those who feel that country should organize international sport competition. On the one hand it could be argued that international Olympics convey many problems. Some individual claim that the host countries have to spend ample amount of money to plan these events due to that sometimes governments borrow money from bank. What is more, it could also argue that when hosting an international sporting event is when spectators come to watch live event but after completing event they leave numerous amount of litter around the street of the hosting which deteriorate the beauty to the place and surrounding as well. However, I feel that organizing the international sports have massive advantages. Firstly, it helps to grow tourism industries because many sports fan come to watch live event across the world and they know more about the particular country who held international events and also visit other places which leads to enhance tourism and employment as well. Take for instance; Australia 2011 Olympics drew in thousands of sports lovers which ultimately made the country benefit a lot in terms of employing large number of people and receiving big number of revenues from selling tickets. In conclusion, although many may believe that arranging sports event leading many problems like spoil environment and places where event held, while it helps to expand hospitality sector and occupation. Therefore, on balance, I strongly believe international athlete beneficial for host country.
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are ubiquitous across the globe.
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believe that it creates
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many
dilemmas. While, I side with those who feel that
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country
should organize
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international
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sport
competition.

On the one hand it could
be argued
that
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international
Olympics convey
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many
problems.
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Some
individual claim that the host
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countries
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have to
spend ample amount of money to plan these
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events
due to that
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sometimes
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governments
borrow money from bank.
What is more
, it could
also
argue that when hosting an
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international
sporting
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event
is when spectators
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come
to
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watch
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live
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event
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but
after completing
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event
they
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leave
numerous amount of litter around the street of the hosting which deteriorate the beauty to the place and surrounding
as well
.

However
, I feel that organizing the
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international
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sports
have massive advantages.
Firstly
, it
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helps
to grow tourism industries
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because
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many
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sports
fan
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come
to
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watch
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live
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event
across the world and they know more about the particular
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country
who held
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international
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events
and
also
visit other places which leads to enhance tourism and employment
as well
. Take
for instance
; Australia 2011 Olympics drew in thousands of
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sports
lovers which
ultimately
made the
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country
benefit a lot in terms of employing large number of
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people
and receiving
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big
number of revenues from selling tickets.

In conclusion
, although
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many
may believe that arranging
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sports
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event
leading
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many
problems like spoil environment and places where
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event
held, while it
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helps
to expand hospitality sector and occupation.
Therefore
, on balance, I
strongly
believe
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international
athlete beneficial for host
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country
.
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IELTS essay Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Other believes that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits.

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