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Many people think we have to focus on the extinction of certain animal species, while others think we should pay attention to the problems of human beings. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people think we have to focus on the extinction of certain animal species, while others think we should pay attention to the problems of human beings. jMlp
According to some people, extinction of certain animal species is meant to be taken into seriousness, either wild animals or not. In my opinion, every specie has a right to live, having some species extinct would only in a way alter the balance of the ecosystem, which would definitely also disorganize the food chain. It is our duty to protect them and not wipe them out. It’s quite confusing why some people want certain animal species extinct and some not to be, I believe the reasons to be unfounded. However, there should be other ways like providing habitats for these species and these shouldn’t be cages but a natural environment in which they could express their freedom. Human beings on the other hand I believe need to work on togetherness, as the present pandemic almost wiped out the earth. Some people believe the money being pumped into conserving animals should be used to reduce the increase in starvation and poverty existing in the human race. I see reasons most people believe we have to focus on humans but doesn’t mean we can’t all thrive in this society we find ourselves. Therefore, The government should stop people from killing animals randomly especially for sports, there could also be a body or organization to monitor certain targeted species facing extinction. Every specie can live together, all we need is total cooperation with each other. I believe we should protect animal species facing extinction but shouldn’t be at the expense of Human well-being and needs.
According to
some
people
, extinction of certain
animal
species
is meant
to
be taken
into seriousness, either wild
animals
or not. In my opinion, every
specie
has a right to
live
, having
some
species extinct would
only
in a way alter the balance of the ecosystem, which would definitely
also
disorganize the food chain. It is our duty to protect them and not wipe them out. It’s quite confusing why
some
people
want certain
animal
species extinct and
some
not to be, I
believe
the reasons to
be unfounded
.

However
, there should be other ways like providing habitats for these species and these shouldn’t be cages
but
a natural environment in which they could express their freedom.

Human beings
on the other hand
I
believe
need to work on togetherness, as the present pandemic almost wiped out the earth.
Some
people
believe
the money
being pumped
into conserving
animals
should be
used
to
reduce
the increase in starvation and poverty existing in the human race. I
see
reasons most
people
believe
we
have to
focus on humans
but
doesn’t mean we can’t all thrive in this society we find ourselves.

Therefore
, The
government
should
stop
people
from killing
animals
randomly
especially
for sports, there could
also
be a body or organization to monitor certain targeted species facing extinction. Every
specie
can
live
together, all we need is total cooperation with each other. I
believe
we should protect
animal
species facing extinction
but
shouldn’t be at the expense of Human well-being and needs.
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IELTS essay Many people think we have to focus on the extinction of certain animal species, while others think we should pay attention to the problems of human beings.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6.0
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