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Many people think that sports should be banned at school

Many people think that sports should be banned at school 0E88q
Many hold the opinion that physical activities should be forbidden at school. Children should spend their time doing meaningful things for their lives instead of playing sports. Children's physical development is affected to a greater if they don't play sports at school. This essay will discuss some causes and effects of this problem. There are some reasons why many people don't want their children to waste time learning sports at school. First, prejudice is appeared by the wealth of social media, which is in shaping our lives. In other words, parents believed that all physical activities at school could cause accidents or many dangerous risks such as broken legs, broken arms, or bruises. They protect their children more carefully and suppose that sports are intense workouts, which is not suitable for the child. For example, not long ago, my mom read an online newspaper about a secondary boy injured when joining a physical class. After that, she said that sports should be banned at school. The mass media have a malign effect on the aspect of people's minds. Second, they are unaware of the role of sports in childhood growth. In a little more detail, parents found that playing sports doesn't bring the essential knowledge instead of studying math, physics, chemistry, or English. For instance, a child who is good at math, physics, and chemistry is valuable more than physical education. However, many optimistic problems may occur. Specifically, inactive children will develop less or less intelligently than active children of the same age. According to the statistics, exercising helps children improve their ability to focus on and remember longer. Moreover, sitting all day in front of the desk will help you study better? By contrast, it makes you fall behind. For example, physical activity reduces the risk for heart disease, high blood pressure, obese, and improves various other aspects of health and fitness, including aerobic capacity, muscle and bone strength, flexibility, insulin sensitivity, and lipid profiles; and reduces stress, anxiety, and depression.
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activities should
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Children
should spend their time doing meaningful things for their
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lives
instead
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sports
. Children's
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physical
development is
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affected
to a greater if they don't play
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sports
at
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school
. This essay will discuss
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some
causes and effects of this problem.

There are
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some
reasons why
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many
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people
don't want their
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children
to waste time learning
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sports
at
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school
.
First
, prejudice
is appeared
by the wealth of social media, which is in shaping our
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lives
.
In other words
, parents believed that all
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physical
activities at
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school
could cause accidents or
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many
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dangerous
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risks
such as broken legs, broken arms, or bruises. They protect their
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children
more
carefully
and suppose that
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sports
are intense workouts, which is not suitable for the child.
For example
, not long ago, my mom read an online newspaper about a secondary boy injured when joining a
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physical
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class
. After that, she said that
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sports
should
be banned
at
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school
. The mass media have a malign effect on the aspect of
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people
's minds. Second, they are unaware of the role of
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sports
in childhood growth. In a
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little
more detail, parents found that playing
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sports
doesn't bring the essential knowledge
instead
of studying math, physics, chemistry, or English.
For instance
, a child who is
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good
at math, physics, and chemistry is valuable more than
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physical
education.

However
,
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many
optimistic problems may occur.
Specifically
, inactive
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children
will develop less or less
intelligently
than active
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children
of the same age. According to the statistics, exercising
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helps
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children
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improve
their ability to focus on and remember longer.
Moreover
, sitting all day in front of the desk will
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help
you study better? By contrast, it
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makes
you fall behind.
For example
,
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physical
activity
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reduces
the
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risk
for heart disease, high blood pressure, obese, and
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improves
various other aspects of health and fitness, including aerobic capacity, muscle and bone strength, flexibility, insulin sensitivity, and lipid profiles; and
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reduces
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stress
, anxiety, and depression.
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IELTS essay Many people think that sports should be banned at school

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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