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Many people put your personal information online for purpose it is signing up for the social

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Due to advancement of technology, people are becoming more digital as compared to past. Recent years have witnessed a rapid incline in involvement of masses in registering up for social websites and online banking. However, l staunchly believe that it should be considered as positive development because these sites give high security to personal data and saves a lot of time of the clients. The first and foremost reason to prove this development positive, is that the private information of clients such as address, telephone number, account details and so on remain quite secure in the light of the fact that the authorised social sites like Google pay and Amazon are very reliable. These applications do not allow third parties to acquire their customer's personal data and consequently, eradicate the risk of any kind of frauds. The another concerned reason to prove this development optimistic, is that it saves a lot of time of the masses. To examplify, if an account holder had signed up in Google pay then he/she do not need to fill the personal information again and again in future for doing bank transactions such as transfer of payment, deposit or withdrawal and so on. This is because, all information will be automatically filled the next time before doing any transaction. All this saves a lot of precious time of the users. To conclude, the aforementioned paragraphs provide plausible reasons to prove this statement positive. However, I perceive that one must be fully aware and careful while signing up in these social websites. Users must ensure that their personal information should only be disclosed to authorised applications.
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people
are becoming more digital as compared to past. Recent years have witnessed a rapid incline in involvement of masses in registering up for social websites and online banking.
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believe that it should
be considered
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positive
development
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because
these sites give high security to
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personal
data and saves
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a lot of
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time
of the clients. The
first
and foremost reason to prove this development
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positive
, is that the private
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information
of clients such as address, telephone number, account
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details
and
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so
on remain quite secure in the light of the fact that the
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authorised
social sites like
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Google pay
and Amazon are
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very
reliable. These applications do not
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allow
third parties to acquire their customer's
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personal
data and
consequently
, eradicate the
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risk
of any kind of frauds. The another concerned reason to prove this development optimistic, is that it saves
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a lot of
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time
of the masses. To
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examplify
, if an account holder had signed up in
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Google pay
then he/she do not need to fill the
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personal
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information
again and again in future for doing bank transactions such as transfer of payment, deposit or withdrawal and
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so
on. This is
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because
, all
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information
will be
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time
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before
doing any transaction. All this saves
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a lot of
precious
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time
of the users.
To conclude
, the aforementioned paragraphs provide plausible reasons to prove this statement
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positive
.
However
, I perceive that one
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must
be
fully
aware and careful while signing up in these social websites. Users
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must
ensure that their
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personal
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information
should
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only
be disclosed
to
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authorised
applications.
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IELTS essay Many people put your personal information online for purpose it is signing up for the social

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
270 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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