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Many people have their homes in the countriside to live in large cities, What factors made people want to move the city?

Many people have their homes in the countriside to live in large cities, What factors made people want to move the city? 9wXqw
In the recent century by developing the enormous industries in large cities a lot of people imigrated to these cities to find better oppurtunities and better income. But living in a large city with huge population, traffic congestion and air pollution is not a desirable live for a number of people. These days the speed of the extention of many cities made many people especially elderly people seek for some place in countyside to be scape from the increasing pollution of their habitant in these cities. It seems the attitude many members of the society have changed and they are all looking for a quiet environment with a beautiful scenery to spend thier weekends. These days even many youngesters and juvenile prefare to go to the countriside and spend the time in nature with their colleagues and they are not incline to go to the cinema or night clubs contrary to the last decades. As a consequence the government must prepare more facilities in rural areas to encourage more the number of the people that are enthusiastic for living far from the cities. Moving the population from large cities has a lot of benefites from the purifying the air, as the number of the automobiles in the street will decrease to the advantages of declining of the poulation on the calmness of the districts. Overall, if we want to alleviate the our hazardous behaviour to the nature, a striaght way is to impede the imigration of the people to large cities and by providing the facilities such as recreational facilities attracted the residents for living in countryside.
In the recent century by developing the enormous industries in
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imigrated
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cities
to find better
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oppurtunities
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large
city with huge population, traffic congestion and air pollution is not a desirable
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live
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people
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extention
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made
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people
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people
seek for
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place in
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countyside
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from the increasing pollution of their habitant in these
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cities
. It seems the attitude
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many
members of the society have
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changed and
they are all looking for a quiet environment with a
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beautiful
scenery to spend
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weekends. These days even
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prefare
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countriside
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colleagues and
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government
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must
prepare more facilities in rural areas to encourage more the number of the
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people
that are enthusiastic for living far from the
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cities
. Moving the population from
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large
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cities
has
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benefites
from the purifying the air, as the number of the automobiles in the street will decrease to the advantages of declining of the
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poulation
on the calmness of the districts.

Overall
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striaght
way is to impede the
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imigration
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and by providing the facilities such as recreational facilities attracted the residents for living in countryside.
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IELTS essay Many people have their homes in the countriside to live in large cities, What factors made people want to move the city?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
267 words
5.5
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