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Many people continue to use cars and motorcycles even though they know that they are bad for the environment. Why is this? What can be done to reduce the use of these vehicles?

Many people continue to use cars and motorcycles even though they know that they are bad for the environment. Why is this? What can be done to reduce the use of these vehicles? xl7a
It is argued by several individual that people are continuously using private vehicles although they are aware that they cause negative effects to the environment. This is because of the people wanting to live luxurious life. To mitigate this problem people should encourage to use bicycle. To embark on, these days a lot of people buy car and motorcycles because this is linked to social status and those who have lots of money want to live luxury life. If individual have their own vehicle they have good reputation in the society, and they are judged on the basis of materialistic things. Furthermore, they also want to show off to their friends and relatives. On the other hand, for some people private motorized vehicles are the important medium for commuting in their workplace. Public vehicle usually are slow and they consume more time to reach their desired destination, so many masses are forced to use their own vehicle to reach in office in time. For example, in the context of Nepal there are no train services, which are usually faster due to the fact that individual are compelled to use cars an motorbike to travel long distance using their cars and motorbikes. However, there are many ways to combact this problem. The first and for most one is persuading citizen to use bicycle because it allows individual to commute to different places without having negative impact in the environment. Bicycle does not use any fuel and they are powered by people, as a result, there will be no more environmental pollution as well as people remain healthy. Moreover, bicycle also reduce traffic congesting, consequently, cities will have more bicycle in the road which means there is less traffic jam and also enables to control noise pollution. In addition, local authorities can be motivate their citizen to use more electric vehicles because they are powered by clean source of energy like electricity and they are also environment friendly, and they can also support electric vehicle manufacturing company to produce cheap electric vehicle so that every citizen can afford to buy this vehicle. For instance, there are many electric car manufacturing company in the world like tesla. In conclusion, to protect the environment and to reduce greenhouse gas emission every individual should walk shorter distance, which will benefit their health and environment.
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individual
that
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people
are
continuously
using private
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vehicles
although they are aware that they cause
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negative
effects to the
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environment
. This is
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because
of the
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people
wanting to
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live
luxurious life. To mitigate this problem
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people
should encourage to
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use
bicycle.

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a lot of
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people
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buy
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car
and motorcycles
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because
this
is linked
to social status and those who have lots of money want to
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live
luxury life. If
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individual
have their
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own
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vehicle
they have
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good
reputation in the society, and they
are judged
on the basis of materialistic things.
Furthermore
, they
also
want to
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show
off to their friends and relatives.
On the other hand
, for
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some
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people
private motorized
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vehicles
are the
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important
medium for commuting in their workplace. Public
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vehicle
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usually are
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slow and
they consume more time to reach their desired destination,
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so
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many
masses
are forced
to
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use
their
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own
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vehicle
to reach in office in time.
For example
, in the context of Nepal there are no train services, which are
usually
faster due to the fact that
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individual
are compelled
to
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use
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cars
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an
motorbike to travel long distance using their
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cars
and motorbikes.

However
, there are
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many
ways to
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combact
this problem. The
first
and for most one is persuading citizen to
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use
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bicycle
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because
it
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allows
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individual
to commute to
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different
places without having
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negative
impact in the
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environment
.
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Bicycle
does not
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use
any
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fuel and
they
are powered
by
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people
,
as a result
, there will be no more environmental pollution
as well
as
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people
remain healthy.
Moreover
,
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bicycle
also
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reduce
traffic congesting,
consequently
, cities will have more
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bicycle
in the road which means there is less traffic jam and
also
enables to control noise pollution.
In addition
, local authorities can be
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motivate
their citizen to
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use
more
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electric
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vehicles
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because
they
are powered
by clean source of energy like
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electricity and
they are
also
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environment
friendly, and they can
also
support
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electric
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vehicle
manufacturing
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company
to produce
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cheap
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electric
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vehicle
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so
that every citizen can afford to
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buy
this
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vehicle
.
For instance
, there are
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many
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electric
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car
manufacturing
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company
in the world like tesla.

In conclusion
, to protect the
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environment
and to
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reduce
greenhouse gas emission every
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individual
should walk shorter distance, which will benefit their health and
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environment
.
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IELTS essay Many people continue to use cars and motorcycles even though they know that they are bad for the environment. Why is this? What can be done to reduce the use of these vehicles?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
389 words
6.0
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