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Many people believed that,as advertisement have become a regular part of our life. Some people know tham advertising a very important role in convincing customer to purches products, than otherside, people do not matter about more advertising, people have started ignore it.

Many people believed that, as advertisement have become a regular part of our life. Some people know tham advertising a very important role in convincing customer to purches products, than otherside, people do not matter about more advertising, people have started ignore it. JK3mD
Many people believed that, as advertisement have become a regular part of our life. Some people know them advertising a very important role in convincing customer to perches products, than other side, people do not matter about more advertising, people have started ignore it. I believed that, advertising is still more important part for introduce new product in the market place and frequently higher selling and various needs are fulfill in the customer. In this, essay, i will explain both side. On the one hand, in the present times, lots of new technologies are available in the 21st century, like, internet, social media, odd plate form, online movies are using a new introduced products marketing techniques. Firstly, some companies are attractive offers, good packaging style, in the boost their sales. People are aware in product related colors and detail in the product because advertisement in the mention the product related positive points. Secondly, publicity to read the newspaper, flyer, billboards and watching the adds during videos and movies or daily shops and see the major holding on the crossword. Additionally, advertising would be displayed on social media, internet, and lots of different sites are available, their achieve the target to increase benefits related products their customer count. Nevertheless, some small companies are not affordable adds and online publicity to highly paid, as well as, not using bigger board, bill board, and all things are not provide the new selling product. However, people are not watching long adds, and lots of adds pamphlets, people are always ignore and skip the long advertising. Moreover, even newspaper reader are so boring lots of advertising in the paper so stop the new subscription. To conclude, i opine that individual should manage money and best method of marketing and good profit for sales and services are some small changes frequently in buying products. Advertising should calculating budget and profit your products attention for buyers even though some people try to disregard it.
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technologies are available in the 21st century, like, internet, social media, odd plate form, online movies are using a
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new
introduced
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products
marketing techniques.

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,
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some
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companies
are attractive offers,
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product
related colors and detail in the
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adds
during videos and movies or daily shops and
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the major holding on the crossword.

Additionally
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on social media, internet, and
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of
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different
sites are available, their achieve the target to increase benefits related
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products
their customer count.

Nevertheless
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opine that individual should manage money and best method of marketing and
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profit for sales and services are
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in buying
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. Advertising should
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budget and profit your
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products
attention for buyers
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IELTS essay Many people believed that, as advertisement have become a regular part of our life. Some people know tham advertising a very important role in convincing customer to purches products, than otherside, people do not matter about more advertising, people have started ignore it.

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
327 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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