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Most of the world's urgent or most significant problems are caused by over-population. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Most of the world's urgent or most significant problems are caused by over-population. with this opinion. QwKa3
Some people argue that a majority of pressing global issues are engendered by population explosion. In my opinion, I completely agree with this point of view for some reasons. One vexing problem worth mentioning is the chronic shortage of housing in many major cities worldwide, especially in densely populated areas in the city center. The primary cause of such an issue is the massive influx of rural migrants who flock to cities in search of better job or education opportunities. Exemplary examples include Bejing or Ho Chi Minh where government have made enormous efforts to combat the overcrowding issue but fall to gain a satisfactory result. Another problem is pollution and climate change, triggered mainly by the burgeoning global population. When many residents inhabit a place, their daily activities tend to do great harm to surroundings, either accidentally or deliberately. For example, households can dump their waste directly into lakes and rivers, or consume too many plastic bags, which leads to an increment in the landfill site whereas deforestation can increase the global temperature tremendously. Worse still, coupled with the ever-increasing size of population the problem seems to exacerbate. Other global issues such as food security, illiteracy or poor healthcare are just amongst the many problems that are caused by the uncontrolled growth of population. If there were few people on this Earth, food supplies can be sufficient to feed the population, or there would be enough schools for children to go to, and hospitals could adequately cater to the needs of patients when they are ill In conclusion, I totally agree with the view that it is over-population that it is over-population that triggers the many above-mentioned issues; therefore, actions should be taken to slow down population growth worldwide.
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argue that a majority of pressing
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explosion. In my opinion, I completely
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major cities worldwide,
especially
in
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populated areas in the city center. The primary cause of such an
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is the massive influx of rural migrants who flock to cities in search of better job or education opportunities. Exemplary examples include
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Bejing
or Ho Chi Minh where
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government
have made enormous efforts to combat the overcrowding
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issue
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but
fall to gain a satisfactory result.

Another
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problem
is pollution and climate
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change
, triggered
mainly
by the burgeoning
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global
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population
. When
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residents inhabit a place, their daily activities tend to do great harm to surroundings, either
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or
deliberately
.
For example
, households can dump their waste
directly
into lakes and rivers, or consume too
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many
plastic bags, which leads to an increment in the landfill site whereas deforestation can increase the
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temperature
tremendously
. Worse
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, coupled with the ever-increasing size of
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population
the
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seems to exacerbate.

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such as food security, illiteracy or poor healthcare are
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amongst the
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by the uncontrolled growth of
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population
. If there were few
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people
on this Earth, food supplies can be sufficient to feed the
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, or there would be
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enough
schools for children to go to, and hospitals could
adequately
cater to the needs of patients when they are
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In conclusion
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with the view that it is over-population that it is over-population that triggers the
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above-mentioned
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to slow down
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population
growth worldwide.
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IELTS essay Most of the world's urgent or most significant problems are caused by over-population. with this opinion.

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