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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree? You should write at least 250 words.

In today's technological world, everyone is fasinated by glamour and the people associated with it with social media. Nowadays, celebrities are given more importance due to social media trends which can impact on youngsters. I believe that media coverage of celebrities have adverse effects on young generation. In this era of social media, younge generations follow their favourite celebrity and are influenced by them. These children take their celebrity as a role model and often attemps to adapt their lifestyles. For instance, cosmetic surgeries have increased by 35% after its trending in celebrities. On the other hand, new trend of haristyles in celebrities attrects boys to follow them. Publishing such trends are not only risks the health of youngsters, but also it develop the idea of physical appearance is more important than character and personility. Another major disadvantge of media coverage is that they make young people feel inferio. For example, celebrities are famouse fot therir leverage lifestyle. They fluntes the new dress and hirestyle eveyday and some of them even have new partner every two weeks, which have negative impact of young people and on their future. In addition, media should consider what they broadcast have no negative effect of coming generation which can cause major problem in different aspects. In conclusion, I agree with the fact that media coverage of celebrities can destory young generation. Indeed, it is imporatant to restrict conent that harms childer as well as parents should moniter and restrict their children lifestyle.
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today
's technological world, everyone is
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fasinated
by glamour and the
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people
associated with it with social
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media
. Nowadays,
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celebrities
are
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given
more importance due to social
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media
trends which can impact on youngsters. I believe that
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media
coverage of
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celebrities
have adverse effects on
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young
generation.

In this era of social
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media
,
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younge
generations follow their
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favourite
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celebrity
and
are influenced
by them. These children take their
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celebrity
as a role model and
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often
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attemps
to adapt their lifestyles.
For instance
, cosmetic surgeries have increased by 35% after its trending in
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celebrities
.
On the other hand
, new trend of
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haristyles
in
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celebrities
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attrects
boys to follow them. Publishing such trends are not
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only
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risks
the health of youngsters,
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but
also
it
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develop
the
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idea
of physical appearance is more
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important
than character and
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personility
.

Another major
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disadvantge
of
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media
coverage is that they
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make
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young
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people
feel
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inferio
.
For example
,
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celebrities
are
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famouse
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fot
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therir
leverage lifestyle. They
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fluntes
the new dress and
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hirestyle
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eveyday
and
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some
of them even have new partner every two weeks, which have
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negative
impact of
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young
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people
and on their future.
In addition
,
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media
should consider what they broadcast have no
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negative
effect of coming generation which can cause major problem in
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different
aspects.

In conclusion
, I
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agree with the fact that
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media
coverage of
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celebrities
can
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destory
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young
generation.
Indeed
, it is
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imporatant
to restrict
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conent
that harms
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childer
as well
as parents should
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moniter
and restrict their children lifestyle.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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