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Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their own countries. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to change negative attitudes? v.2

Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their own countries. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to change negative attitudes? v. 2
Some would say international tourism is not beneficial for the host country. The reason would be a cultural difference, and the probable solution would be, to guide the visitor about the culture. Some countries in the world have many cultural heritages and natural sceneries, which attracts tourists from all over the world. However, at the same time, those countries have a dominant cultural attitude. For example, women have to cover their heads all the time outside the home; likewise, the special attire needed to enter the workship places. Many foreign tourists, sometimes may not aware of this culture; therefore, they may get into trouble. As a consequence, visitors stop their trip to that country; the locals also protest their entrance, which can lead to a significant economic loss. I believe this is the responsibility of a visitor and citizens of the host country to resolve this issue together. Before entering into a culturally constant state, a visitor should know their fundamental cultural values. Like, what to wear, do not discuss religious and political issues among their residents because five fingers are not equal. At the same time, I believe the locals should respect and advise the visitors appropriately and understand their cultural value also and not respond extremely if they do something unintentionally. For example, at the entrance gate of many shrines in Pakistan, locals provide the headcovers to men and women before entering at no cost. In conclusion, the cultural difference in some countries is the reason can affect tourism, and this can curb by the locals if they can guide their guest appropriately.
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would say international tourism is not beneficial for the host
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country
. The reason would be a
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cultural
difference, and the probable solution would be, to guide the
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visitor
about the culture.

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Some
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countries
in the world have
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many
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cultural
heritages and natural sceneries, which attracts tourists from all over the world.
However
, at the same time, those
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countries
have a dominant
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cultural
attitude.
For example
, women
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have to
cover their heads all the time outside the home;
likewise
, the special attire needed to enter the
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workship
places.
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Many
foreign tourists,
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sometimes
may not aware of this culture;
therefore
, they may
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get
into trouble. As a consequence,
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visitors
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stop
their trip to that
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country
; the
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locals
also
protest their entrance, which can lead to a significant economic loss.

I believe this is the responsibility of a
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visitor
and citizens of the host
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country
to resolve this issue together.
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Before
entering into a
culturally
constant state, a
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visitor
should know their fundamental
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cultural
values. Like, what to wear, do not discuss religious and political issues among their residents
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because
five fingers are not equal. At the same time, I believe the
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locals
should respect and advise the
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visitors
appropriately
and understand their
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cultural
value
also
and not respond
extremely
if they do something
unintentionally
.
For example
, at the entrance gate of
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many
shrines in Pakistan,
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locals
provide the
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headcovers
to
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men
and women
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before
entering at no cost.

In conclusion
, the
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cultural
difference in
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some
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countries
is the reason can affect tourism, and this can curb by the
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locals
if they can guide their guest
appropriately
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their own countries. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to change negative attitudes? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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