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Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents’ responsibility; while others think it should be the government’s duty. What is your opinion?

Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents’ responsibility; while others think it should be the government’s duty. What is your opinion? mOLd
It is the desire of the people that streets in their premises should be clean and tidy. While some think individuals have the primary responsibility for making this happen, others think it is the obligation of the state. Both views are significant, and hence a detailed discussion is needed before framing a logical conclusion. On the one hand, those who think it is the government’s responsibility feel that only a systematic approach can make this happen. They think that there should be a well-established legal system, which should be kept before the citizens, and this can ensure the cleanliness of their surroundings. Most governments levy taxes from the public, either directly and indirectly, and naturally, it becomes their responsibility to maintain streets clean and tidy, they add. Finally, they think that the cleaning process involves some sorts of investment, staff and machineries, and individuals can hardly afford such expenses. On the other hand, those who think the other way believe that the way which the streets proximal to a residential community reflects their identity. It is to be understood that clean and tidy surroundings are indeed the pride of the residents. Secondly, they highlight the social responsibility of maintaining these places tidy. In order to have a healthy and safe environment, an individual should not only maintain his home clean, but also his surroundings. Lastly, only when the primary initiative is taken by the individual residents, ranging from proper segregation and disposal of wastes to growing trees for shades, governments can accomplish the goal in a perfect manner. After analysing both these views in detail, even though it appears that both governments and residents have equal responsibility in making the streets clean and tidy, I think the role of the latter is more significant.
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streets
in their premises should be
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clean
and
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tidy
. While
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some
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think
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individuals
have the primary
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responsibility
for making this happen, others
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think
it is the obligation of the state. Both views are significant, and
hence
a detailed discussion
is needed
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before
framing a logical conclusion.

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think
it is the
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government’s
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responsibility
feel that
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only
a systematic approach can
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make
this happen. They
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think
that there should be a well-established legal system, which should be
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kept
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before
the citizens, and this can ensure the cleanliness of their surroundings. Most
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governments
levy taxes from the public, either
directly
and
indirectly
, and
naturally
, it becomes their
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responsibility
to maintain
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streets
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clean
and
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tidy
, they
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add
.
Finally
, they
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think
that the cleaning process involves
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some
sorts of investment, staff and
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machineries
, and
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individuals
can hardly afford such expenses.
On the other hand
, those who
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think
the other way believe that the way which the
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streets
proximal to a residential community reflects their identity. It is to
be understood
that
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clean
and
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tidy
surroundings are
indeed
the pride of the residents.
Secondly
, they highlight the social
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responsibility
of maintaining these places
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tidy
. In order to have a healthy and safe environment, an
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individual
should not
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only
maintain his home
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clean
,
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but
also
his surroundings.
Lastly
,
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only
when the primary initiative
is taken
by the
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individual
residents, ranging from proper segregation and disposal of wastes to growing trees for shades,
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governments
can accomplish the goal
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in a perfect manner
.

After
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analysing
both these views in detail,
even though
it appears that both
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governments
and residents have equal
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responsibility
in making the
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streets
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clean
and
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tidy
, I
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think
the role of the latter is more significant.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents’ responsibility; while others think it should be the government’s duty. What is your opinion?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
294 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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