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Many people believe that family members have less communication with each other compared to the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that family members have less communication with each other compared to the past. NOWy
Families as the smallest part of society have always been considered and have undergone tremendous changes in recent years. One of them, which is supported by a number of people, is that we interact less in families than in the past and I completely agree with it on the basis of compelling reasons. Firstly, the modern lifestyle does not allow people to have much spare time to be with their family. That is, when we live in a competitive period that forces one to work longer hours than in the past in order to stay in competition fields, family time is reduced and it is abundantly clear that it leads to a reduction in their communication. Take a family of four whose parents are both employed as an example. If they have to work until late to hold down their jobs, spending time with their children is limited to weekends, which is very short. While this time was more than this before the modern era. Secondly, what weakens the interaction of family members is the physical distance. This feature, which was in the past to a lesser extent, is enhanced by advanced technology that provides almost unlimited mobility. For instance, many young people leave their hometown if they are accepted to a better university or receive a great job offer from a foreign company. Although they can be in touch with them, this gap affects the effectiveness of communication because people do not see others face to face. In conclusion, in my view, members of families communicate less than in the past since they do not abundance leisure time and also can immigrate more. This is, in fact, overshadowed by the needs of families to avoid living in distressed circumstances has faded due to the fact being in such an atmosphere requests more energy and concentration.
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Families
as the smallest part of society have always
been considered
and have undergone tremendous
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changes
in recent years. One of them, which
is supported
by a number of
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people
, is that we interact less in
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families
than in the
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past
and I completely
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agree
with it on the basis of compelling reasons.

Firstly
, the modern lifestyle does not
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allow
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people
to have much spare
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time
to be with their
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family
.
That is
, when we
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live
in a competitive period that forces one to work longer hours than in the
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past
in order to stay in competition fields,
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family
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time
is
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reduced
and it is
abundantly
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clear
that it leads to a reduction in their communication. Take a
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family
of four whose parents are both employed as an example. If they
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have to
work until late to hold down their jobs, spending
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time
with their children
is limited
to weekends, which is
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very
short. While this
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time
was more than this
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before
the modern era.

Secondly
, what weakens the interaction of
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family
members is the physical distance. This feature, which was in the
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past
to a lesser extent,
is enhanced
by advanced technology that provides almost unlimited mobility.
For instance
,
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many
young
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people
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leave
their hometown if they are
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accepted
to a better university or receive a great job offer from a foreign
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company
. Although they can be in touch with them, this gap affects the effectiveness of communication
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because
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people
do not
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see
others face to face.

In conclusion
, in my view, members of
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families
communicate less than in the
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past
since they do not abundance leisure
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time
and
also
can immigrate more.

This is, in fact, overshadowed by the needs of
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families
to avoid living in distressed circumstances has faded due to the fact being in such an atmosphere requests more energy and concentration.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that family members have less communication with each other compared to the past.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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